Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear sir / mam

I am a raj i just seen your advertisement related with teaching children i just want to request you if its possible then can I get this job .

Actually I teach the students previously with different languages because I learned various languages to gain my experience so that's help me in my life nowadays. Their are some reasons I really need this job because I am a student i just arrived here 1 year ago so I need job for completing my needs which is important for me .

I appreciate you If you provide me job I help your children as much as you need I also help you when you need me so I just want to say that please if its possible then contact me as soon as possible because If I get this I solve so many things of my life thanku for giving your time

Your faithfully

Raj

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers all parts of the task prompt, addressing suitability, additional help, and reasons for wanting the job. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited and basic. For instance, the reason for wanting the job is simply stated as needing money as a student. While the bullet points are addressed, the tone and format lack the standard conventions of a formal letter (beginning with 'Dear sir / mam' instead of addressing the couple properly). The purpose is clear, but the execution remains at a foundational level, aligning well with the Band 5 descriptors where ideas are somewhat under-developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The letter lacks proper paragraphing and consists of one large run-on block of text, which significantly hinders readability and logical flow. Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, and occasionally inaccurate (for example, the excessive use of 'so' and 'because' to chain clauses together). There is no clear overall progression of ideas, and referencing is weak, as seen in the sudden shift between explaining teaching experience and stating financial needs. These characteristics reflect the Band 4 to Band 5 descriptors, showing inadequate and repetitive management of cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily restricted to daily conversational English (e.g., 'job', 'help', 'teach', 'needs'). There are noticeable lexical and collocation errors, such as 'advertisement related with' instead of 'advertisement for', and 'completing my needs' instead of 'meeting my financial needs'. Attempts to use less common words are absent. Vocabulary control is minimally adequate to convey the basic message, but the frequent inaccuracies and limited range place this firmly at Band 4.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying almost entirely on run-on simple and compound sentences linked by coordinating conjunctions like 'and', 'so', and 'because'. There is a complete lack of punctuation, with periods and capitalisation misused throughout the text (e.g., starting sentences with lowercase letters and stringing clauses together without commas or full stops). Frequent grammatical errors, such as tense inconsistencies ('I teach the students previously') and missing articles, cause strain for the reader, matching the Band 4 descriptors.

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