Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear SIr,

I recently saw your advertisement about a job.I want to apply for this job position Beacuse I have great exprience in it. Firstly, I completed Early childood program in which I learn about children .After that, I have six month experience and some skills .So, I can easily teach children about language because it is my mother tongue so I am very fluent in it. If you will hire me, then I will also teach some skills like cooperation, confidence which is very beneficial in his future.The reason why I want this job is that I want to gain more experience and improve myself. I also love children very much . So, this is great opportunity for me to spend some time with children.It gives me some relaxtion . I hope you understand and hire my for this position. I am looking forward for your response.

Thank you .

Your's faithfully,

Arshdeep Kaur.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all three bullet points required by the task. You explain your suitability for the job by mentioning your background, such as 'I completed Early childood program' and that the language is your mother tongue. You also suggest what else you could do by stating 'I will also teach some skills like cooperation, confidence'. Finally, you give reasons for wanting the job, noting that 'I want to gain more experience and improve myself' and 'spend some time with children'. The tone is appropriate for a letter, though the sign-off 'Your's faithfully' contains a minor punctuation error. All parts of the task are adequately addressed, earning a solid Band 6.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter has a coherent overall arrangement, and the purpose is clear from the beginning. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'After that', and 'So' to connect your ideas. However, the paragraphing is underdeveloped; the entire body of the letter is compressed into a single block of text rather than being broken into logical paragraphs for each bullet point. Additionally, referencing is occasionally mechanical, as seen in the repetition of sentences starting with 'I'. While the progression of ideas is generally easy to follow, the lack of effective paragraphing prevents the response from reaching a higher band, placing it at a Band 5.5.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, but it remains somewhat limited and repetitive. You successfully employ some relevant terms related to the job, such as 'advertisement', 'position', 'mother tongue', and 'experience'. However, there are several noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, including 'SIr' (Sir), 'Beacuse' (Because), 'exprience' (experience), 'childood' (childhood), 'learn' (learned), 'his' instead of 'their' or 'future generations', and 'relaxtion' (relaxation). Furthermore, some phrases lack natural collocation. Because these errors occur frequently and cause minor distractions for the reader, the lexical resource fits the Band 5.0 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response demonstrates a mix of simple and some complex sentence forms, such as 'If you will hire me, then I will also teach some skills...'. However, there are frequent grammatical errors in tense usage, capitalization, and punctuation. Examples include 'I recently saw your advertisement about a job.I want to apply...' (missing space after the period), 'in which I learn about children' (incorrect tense), and 'hire my for this position' (pronoun error). The conditional structure 'If you will hire me, then I will...' contains an unnecessary future tense in the if-clause. Despite these errors, communication is not impeded, and the meaning remains clear. This corresponds to a Band 5.5.

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