Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mr and Mrs Smith,

Hope you are doing good. I am writing to discuss about the advertisement which i saw yesterday to teach the punjabi language to your chidren.

I am working as a professional tutor and teach the pupils for last seven years. My native language is punjabi and I can teach students appropriately. While reading online newspaper I noticed your advertisement that you need a good mentor for your two kids to teach them your language. Moreover, I am available on the weekends, if you will be busy so I can also take care of your children.

In addition, I came to Australia as a student and recently I have done my studies. I am looking for part time job which is suitable for me and according to my profession. As your family also belongs to Punjab, so I can give assist your children to learn our mother tongue.

I hope you could consider my application. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Best Wishes,

Harman

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You have covered all three bullet points required in the task instructions. You explained your suitability by mentioning your seven years of experience as a professional tutor and your native fluency in Punjabi. You also mentioned what else you could do by offering to take care of the children on weekends. Additionally, you provided clear reasons for wanting the job, stating that you are looking for a suitable part-time position after finishing your studies. The tone is appropriate for a letter to parents, and the purpose of the communication is clear throughout. Although the development of ideas is somewhat straightforward, all parts of the prompt are adequately addressed, earning a solid Band 6.5.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter follows a clear, logical structure with an appropriate opening and closing. Paragraphing is used to separate distinct ideas, such as your tutoring background in the second paragraph and your reasons for applying in the third paragraph. Cohesive devices are employed to connect sentences, such as 'Moreover' and 'In addition'. However, referencing is occasionally imprecise, such as 'I am writing to discuss about the advertisement', where the transition is a bit mechanical. Overall arrangement is coherent and easy to follow, supporting a clear progression of ideas from your introduction to your conclusion, which fits the descriptor for Band 6.5.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

Your vocabulary range is adequate for the task. You successfully use relevant terms related to teaching and employment, such as 'professional tutor', 'native language', and 'part-time job'. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and phrasing, such as writing 'discuss about' (instead of just 'discuss') and 'i saw' (with a lowercase 'i'). You also repeat certain words like 'teach' and 'children' frequently. While you attempt some less common vocabulary, the occasional errors and repetitive lexical choices prevent a higher score, placing your performance firmly in the Band 6 category.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'While reading online newspaper I noticed your advertisement that you need a good mentor...' and 'As your family also belongs to Punjab, so I can give assist your children...'. There are several grammatical errors and awkward structures throughout the text, including missing articles ('online newspaper', 'part time job'), incorrect verb forms ('have done my studies' instead of 'completed my studies'), and redundant conjunctions ('As your family... so I can...'). Despite these errors, communication is not impeded, and the majority of your sentences remain understandable, reflecting the characteristics of a Band 6.0.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.