Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter
- explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
- say what else you could do for the family
- give your reasons for wanting the job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Thomson family,
I recently show your advertisement for a tutor in Australia, for teaching your childrens panjabi language. I want to present myself for the same. Because firstly Panjabi is my mother tounge, which makes me have a great control over it. Furthermore I also a degree in teaching panjabi language which makes me even more stronger candidate for the same. I have teached panjabi for many years in Australia.
Not just the teaching, can i also help you with your childrens day case, as i have a diploma in day care as well from a very renound university in Australia and also have 2 years of experience working in a day care. Furthermore i also have skills to cooks for your kids, when ever its necessary or when you have a busy schedule which i learn in my daycare job.
While making a decision i hope you keep my skills and knowledge in mind. And hoping to hear soon from you.
Your faithful,
Rohan
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The response successfully covers all the bullet points outlined in the prompt. You addressed why you are suitable for the job by mentioning that Punjabi is your mother tongue and that you hold a teaching degree and extensive experience. You also explained what else you could do by offering child day care and cooking assistance, and you clearly stated your reasons for wanting the position. The purpose of the letter is clear, and the tone is appropriate for a formal personal letter, although some ideas could be slightly more expanded to reach a higher band. Overall, all parts of the task are adequately addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The letter is generally coherent and follows a logical structure, starting with an appropriate greeting and ending with a sign-off. Paragraphing is used to separate different ideas, such as your qualifications in the first body paragraph and additional services like cooking and day care in the second. However, some cohesive devices feel slightly mechanical or repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'Furthermore' and 'also'. Referencing is mostly clear, but the overall progression could be smoother with a wider variety of linking words.
Lexical Resource: Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common items related to employment and childcare, such as 'advertisement', 'tutor', 'diploma', and 'schedule'. However, there are noticeable spelling and word-choice errors that detract from precision, such as 'tounge' instead of 'tongue', 'childrens' instead of 'children', 'renound' instead of 'renowned', and 'cooks' instead of 'cook'. Despite these inaccuracies, communication is not impeded, and the meaning remains clear throughout the letter.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some control over grammar. However, there are several grammatical and punctuation errors throughout the text, such as 'I recently show your advertisement' (tense error), 'Furthermore I also a degree' (missing verb), and 'I have teached' (incorrect past participle). Punctuation is also problematic in places, particularly with run-on sentences and sentence fragments like 'And hoping to hear soon from you.' These errors occasionally cause strain for the reader, placing this criterion at a solid band 5.5.
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