Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to apprise you about the relevant experience related to your advertisement. Its best opportunity for me to teaching my native language to your childrens. I did my master's in this language and i have been teaching from last seven years.

I can provide you best time schedule according to your wish. Moreover, this is my pleasure to learn more about your culture while teaching your children's at your home. I can provide them extra curricular activities too for other subjects. I would like to tell them about our different tradition and variety of foods.

I am requesting you to give me an opportunity because currently i am not working anywhere. It will help me to manage my personal expenses. I am confident about that i will try to give best education to your children's. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Your faithfully,

Jashandeep Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task, meeting the basic requirements by explaining your suitability, mentioning what else you could do for the family, and giving reasons for wanting the job. However, some parts are more fully developed than others. For instance, while your qualifications are stated clearly, your explanation of why you want the job focuses mainly on your current employment status and financial management, remaining somewhat brief and limited in extension. To reach a higher level, all bullet points would need to be fully elaborated with richer details and extended supporting points, rather than remaining somewhat under-developed in places.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter maintains a coherent overall arrangement with a clear paragraph structure, dedicating distinct sections to your background, additional help, and reasons for applying. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Moreover' and 'Furthermore-style' transitions, but referencing and cohesion are occasionally mechanical or slightly faulty, such as the abrupt opening phrase 'I am writing to apprise you about the relevant experience related to your advertisement.' Paragraphing is used sufficiently to organise the ideas logically. To achieve a higher band, the progression between ideas would need to flow more naturally without relying on rigid transitional markers, ensuring seamless links across sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

An adequate range of vocabulary is attempted for the task, successfully communicating your general message. There are several noticeable word-choice, word-form, and spelling errors, such as 'apprise you about' instead of 'apprise you of', 'Its best opportunity' instead of 'It is the best opportunity', 'childrens' and 'children's' instead of 'children', and 'tradition' instead of 'traditions'. These errors do not seriously impede communication, but they reflect a limited and developing lexical range. To improve further, you should refine your control over plurals, prepositions, and less common vocabulary items to avoid basic word-formation inaccuracies.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The text displays a mix of simple and some complex sentence forms, such as 'I can provide you best time schedule according to your wish.' However, there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation, including missing articles ('provide you best time schedule'), tense and aspect errors ('have been teaching from last seven years' instead of 'for the last seven years'), and pronoun-verb agreement or omitted subjects ('and i have been teaching', 'because currently i am not working'). While communication is maintained, these recurring errors place the writing firmly in this category. To progress, you need greater control over verb tenses, prepositions in grammatical patterns, and capitalization.

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