Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear John,

I am writing this letter for teaching Hindi language clases which you have advertised online in need of tutor for your two juveniles. I am professional hindi teacher from last four years , Moreover , many students have achived their target in limited time by following my rule of teaching them.

I can give home tution to your children ,so that they do not waste their energy travelling ,Along with that i am willing to give reasonale discount on fees . There will be no extra charges for study material as i provide free booklets .

I need this job because i am teaching numer of chikdren in same area ,therefore it will e easy for me to attend number of students in same location.

I will wait for your email .

Yours truly,

Lovdeep

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the three requested points: you describe your teaching experience, offer home tuition and free materials, and explain that the job would fit with your existing students. However, the reasons for wanting the position are limited, and the claim that students achieve their targets is not supported with an example. The letter also contains only 137 words, so it does not meet the required minimum of 150; this leaves less room to develop your suitability and what you could contribute to the family. Add specific details, such as how you would teach the children or another practical way you could help, and explain more fully why working with this family appeals to you.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a generally clear arrangement: you introduce your application, describe what you can offer, explain your reason for applying, and close politely. Paragraphing helps distinguish these points, and phrases such as “Along with that” and “therefore” show how ideas relate. Some connections are mechanical or unclear, however. For example, “I need this job because I am teaching number of children in same area” does not clearly explain why this makes you want the position, and the transition from your teaching experience to the discount and materials could be smoother. Use clearer links between each point and organise the body around the three requirements in the prompt.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “professional,” “discount,” “fees,” and “study material,” so the reader can understand the main offer. However, the range is limited and several spelling or word-choice errors make the letter less polished: “clases,” “achived,” “reasonale,” and “chikdren” are examples. Some expressions are also unnatural, such as “your two juveniles” and “following my rule of teaching them.” Choose straightforward, accurate phrases such as “your children” and “my teaching approach,” and check spelling carefully. More precise language about your teaching methods and experience would help you express your suitability more convincingly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example with “so that” and “therefore,” but the range of sentence structures is limited and errors are frequent enough to make parts of the letter awkward. Examples include “I am professional hindi teacher from last four years,” which needs an article and a more suitable tense construction, and “it will e easy for me to attend number of students,” where the sentence structure is incomplete. Commas are also used where full stops would make the ideas clearer. Practise accurate present-perfect forms for experience, articles before singular countable nouns, and complete sentence patterns; then proofread punctuation and agreement.

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