Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear sir or Madam,

I am writting to express my concern regarding the advertisement I recently saw in my phone.

I feel that I am the suitable for this job because I have 5 years of experience to teach the hindi language in my college and I teach over 500 studsnts in my career so, I think I am the best person to do this job.

moreover, I also teach pupils who study 5th to 12th standard as well. If you have another children who study in high school I can also teach him at a same time as well and I am also available to do household work like dusting,cooking and gardning and so on.

Inaddition, I really like to do this job because teching children a new language is my profession for 10 years and I have lot of free time because this time of the year is not that busy and i have plenty of time to do this job.

I look forward to your prompt response.

yoursfaithfull,

Rajan bali.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the three main points: you describe your Hindi-teaching experience, offer help with teaching other children and household tasks, and explain that you enjoy teaching and have free time. These details make your application relevant. However, some points are not fully clear or convincing. For example, you say you have five years of college teaching experience, then describe teaching children for ten years; explain how these experiences fit together. The offer to do household work is useful, but could be more specific about what you can realistically help with. The opening also says “concern,” which does not clearly express interest in the advertised position. A clearer application purpose and better-developed reasons would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter has a recognisable structure, with separate paragraphs for your suitability, additional help, and reasons for applying. Linking expressions such as “moreover” and “Inaddition” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, progression is sometimes mechanical, and the links do not always make the relationship between points clear. The second paragraph combines teaching older pupils with household duties, while the final paragraph repeats the idea of teaching as your profession without clearly building on the earlier experience. Some sentences are also difficult to follow because several ideas are joined together. Use clearer paragraph focus and connect each point logically; for example, explain your teaching background first, then give a separate, concise paragraph about practical help for the family.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “experience,” “language,” “pupils,” and “household work,” so the reader can understand the main message. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unsuitable for a formal application. “Express my concern” does not convey that you are applying, and “advertisement I recently saw in my phone” is not natural phrasing. Spelling errors such as “writting,” “studsnts,” “gardning,” and “teching” are noticeable and reduce accuracy. Some expressions, including “at a same time,” also sound unnatural. Aim for precise, conventional phrases and check spelling carefully; this will make your application sound more confident and professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional structure in “If you have another children who study in high school I can also teach him.” However, the longer constructions are often faulty, and grammatical errors occur throughout. Examples include “I am the suitable” (article use), “experience to teach” (verb pattern), “another children” (number agreement), and “I have lot of free time” (article use). The sentence beginning “If you have…” also needs clearer punctuation and agreement. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, particularly at the start of paragraphs and in the closing. Practise accurate sentence patterns and review articles, plurals, verb forms, and punctuation before combining several ideas in one sentence.

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