Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir/madam,

I am writing this letter to request you to give me a chance to teach your children to learn dielect.

I can teach your children to learn language withing in a year becuase i am multilingual person who can speak english, punjabi, hindi and french. I can assit them to learn basic rule of grammer which play vital role for learning every language. They can communicate with me that will be helpful to learn proper prouniciation and tone of language.

I can also take care of them in your absence like except teaching I will feed them, play with them so that they do not feel bored while living alone at home. Apart from this, I will also helo in cooking as i can prepare many dishes that liked by children.

I want this job due to getting an experinece as well as I get chance to explore a foriegn nation. Moreover, i need this job for earning bread and butter.

I will be appriciated if you hire me for this job. I will wait fo ryour prompt.

Yours faithfully,

Gurpreet kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three requested points: you explain your language skills, offer childcare and cooking help, and give reasons for wanting the position. The details about speaking several languages and helping the children practise pronunciation make your suitability relevant. However, some points are less fully developed than others. For example, “I need this job for earning bread and butter” gives a reason, but you could explain more positively what you hope to gain from teaching the children or living in Australia. The offer to care for them is useful, though it would be stronger with a specific example of your experience or how you would keep them safe and engaged. Overall, the letter fulfils its purpose, but further supporting detail would make it more convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: you introduce your application, describe your teaching suitability, add other help you can offer, and explain your motivation before closing. Paragraphing supports this progression, and linking phrases such as “Apart from this” and “Moreover” help connect related points. This meets the expected level of coherent organisation and shows some flexibility in linking ideas. At times, however, connections are mechanical or unclear. The sentence beginning “I can also take care of them in your absence like except teaching” combines several ideas awkwardly, making the relationship between teaching and childcare difficult to follow. Use one clear transition and separate the offers into distinct sentences. The closing phrase “I will wait fo ryour prompt” also does not clearly express the intended next step.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including relevant terms such as “multilingual,” “pronunciation,” “grammar,” and “communicate.” There are also attempts at more formal or idiomatic language, such as “play a vital role” and “bread and butter.” However, noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision and can make parts of the letter harder to understand. “Dielect” appears to be an incorrect word for the language you intend to teach, while “learn language” and “earning bread and butter” are not natural choices in this context. Several misspellings, including “becuase,” “assit,” and “experinece,” also affect readability. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and proofread carefully; a smaller set of well-controlled expressions will sound more professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, for example, “I can teach your children…” and the sentence explaining that communicating with you will help their pronunciation. The main message is generally understandable, but grammatical control is uneven, particularly in longer sentences. In “I can teach your children to learn language withing in a year,” the verb pattern and article use are faulty; a clearer structure would be “I can teach your children my language within a year.” The clause “which play vital role” also needs subject–verb agreement and an article. In “I will feed them, play with them so that they do not feel bored,” the list needs parallel construction. Practise accurate verb patterns, articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, then check each longer sentence for a clear grammatical structure.

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