Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear........,

I just saw your article for searching a teacher for your kids to learn Urdu language, I want to tell you that i have done masters in urdu and working as a techer past 6 years i would love to teach your kids too and will pour them with the love of language too and they will surely start speaking it in 15 to 30 days soo fluently that you will appreciate my teaching and i can give them over time on free hours on weekend too because i myself is found of this type of job as i was looking for jobs to pay the rent and other bills to live happily and to enjoys the atmosphere which i just entered because i just come from pakistan as a. student on my own expenses and i further want to do higher studies in australia.

i shall be very kind full to you if you let me enjoy this opportunity. Thanks to you.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the main purpose of the letter and include relevant points: your Urdu master’s degree and six years of teaching support your suitability, while your wish to earn money and continue higher studies explains your interest. You also offer weekend teaching, but the task asks what else you could do for the family; this point is not clearly answered, since extra teaching time is still part of the main job. Several claims, such as the children becoming fluent in 15 to 30 days, are not convincingly supported. The letter’s purpose is understandable, but the ideas are limited and some parts of the task are only partially covered. Add a specific family contribution, such as helping with homework or preparing meals.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows a broadly sensible order: you introduce the advertisement, describe your qualifications, explain your reasons, and close politely. However, nearly all the information is packed into one long sentence, so the reader has to work to identify where one idea ends and another begins. The repeated use of “and” creates a run-on effect, and links such as “because” connect several different points without a clear progression. The final request and thanks provide a basic closing, but the letter would be easier to follow if divided into short paragraphs—for example, qualifications, help for the family, and reasons for applying—and if each paragraph focused on one main idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the situation, including “masters in Urdu,” “teaching,” “higher studies,” and “opportunity,” so the reader can understand your main message. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or informal, which sometimes makes the meaning less clear. For example, “article for searching a teacher” is not a natural way to refer to an advertisement, and “pour them with the love of language” is an awkward expression. There are also spelling and word-form errors such as “techer,” “soo,” and “found of.” Aim for precise, natural phrases suited to a formal application letter, and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine several ideas using clauses with “because” and “that,” but the response relies heavily on one extended sentence, and these complex attempts are often faulty. Errors in sentence boundaries and punctuation make the relationships between ideas difficult to follow. There are also problems with verb forms and agreement, as in “i myself is found” and “i just come from pakistan,” as well as missing or incorrect articles and capitalization. These errors occur frequently enough to cause some difficulty for the reader, even though the overall message can be understood. Use shorter, complete sentences and practise accurate present and past forms, subject–verb agreement, and sentence punctuation.

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