Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear sir,

I am writing this letter to fulfill the requirement of tutor to teach my natuve language.

I am Rohan Patel, currently working as linguistic professor in gujarat university. I have done a PHD in my two languages, Firstly our native tough Gujarati and secondly Hindi. Moreover, I have had

three year of experience in teaching children from age group of 4 to 10 year. Therefore, I believe, I will a suitable option to teach your kids. Furthermore, while pursuing post grduation, i were also keen in story telling. so in free time, while conducting online class, I will share various stories in native language which not not only aid children to make learning intersting but also make more engagable.

I am very keen to take this kind of job because of its challenging nature. Additionally, it benefited me to understand new culture while conversing forigen residents such as you.

I am looking forward to get your response.

Yours sincerely,

Rohan

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the main purpose of the letter and give relevant information about your suitability, including your university role, language qualifications and experience teaching children. You also explain your motivation, mentioning the challenge and the opportunity to learn about another culture. However, the request to say what else you could do for the family is only partly developed: storytelling is presented mainly as a way to support the children’s language learning, rather than as a broader contribution to family life. Your reasons for wanting the job are also brief. Develop these points with specific examples, and make the letter’s purpose and offer clearer from the opening.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: you introduce yourself and your qualifications, describe an additional activity, explain your motivation, and close politely. Paragraphing helps the reader follow these stages, and linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Therefore,” and “Additionally” show relationships between ideas. At times, however, the links feel mechanical, and the long qualifications paragraph combines several points without a clear transition. The storytelling offer would be easier to follow if separated from your teaching experience and connected explicitly to what you could do for the family. Use fewer formulaic connectors and organise each paragraph around one clear purpose.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the task, including “linguistic professor,” “experience in teaching,” “challenging nature,” and “understand new culture.” These choices communicate your qualifications and motivation, but the range is uneven and several spelling or word-choice errors make parts less natural, such as “natuve,” “native tough,” “forigen residents,” and “engagable.” Some phrases are also imprecise: “fulfill the requirement of tutor” does not clearly express that you are applying for the advertised position. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise language for your teaching approach and family contribution would make the letter clearer and more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including a sentence beginning “Moreover” and a clause explaining how storytelling could help the children. However, errors occur across sentence structures and verb forms, and they sometimes make the reader pause. Examples include “I will a suitable option,” “I were also keen,” and “it benefited me,” where the verb forms do not fit the intended meaning. Articles and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “as linguistic professor” and the lower-case “i” after a full stop. Practise checking each sentence for a complete verb phrase, consistent tense, and correct articles. Shorter, accurately controlled sentences would improve clarity while you build range.

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