Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Mrs.Shrama,

I hope you are doing well,

I am writing to inquire you that, I am eligible for teaching my own languages to your children's for a year. I have a great experimece in childcare sector thats why I am interested in thsi job.

The primary reason why I am aprroapriate for job is that, I am fluent in Australian language due to this, I can esily teach to your youngsters.Despite from this, I am elgible for part time job from 8 am to 2 pm in the evening.Additionally,my schedule is definately work for a five adys in a week.

I can also do multifarious tasks for family. Whenever they need assistance in any kind of household work, I can help them in washing utensils, mopping floor and other basic tasks.I can also watering the plants in my leisure time.

The main reason why I wanting this job is that, I have keen interest to job in childcare sector, which leads to that, after doing this job I get more experience which is beneficial for me.

I hope you will be hire me upon my details.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Your Sincerely,

Taran

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three requested points: you describe childcare experience and language ability, offer household help such as washing dishes and watering plants, and explain that you want more experience in childcare. These details make the letter relevant and its purpose clear. However, some points are not fully explained or are unclear. For example, “Australian language” does not identify the language you would teach, and the stated working hours are confusing (“from 8 am to 2 pm in the evening”). Your reasons for wanting the position are also brief and focus mainly on gaining experience. Clarify your language skills and availability, and develop your motivation with a specific reason for wanting to work with this family.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: an opening, separate paragraphs about suitability, extra help, and motivation, followed by a closing. This makes the main points easy to locate. You also use linking expressions such as “Additionally,” “Whenever,” and “The main reason,” although some connections sound mechanical or do not express the intended relationship clearly. For instance, “Despite from this” is an awkward transition, and the sentence about your schedule is difficult to follow. The opening and closing are present, but the letter would flow more naturally if each paragraph developed one point with clearer links between sentences. Use simpler transitions where needed and check that pronouns and references clearly identify who is doing each action.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the situation, including “childcare sector,” “assistance,” “household work,” and “leisure time,” and you attempt some less common expressions such as “multifarious tasks.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the message harder to understand. “Australian language” is unclear in this context, while “eligible for teaching” and “I can also watering” do not express your meaning naturally. Spelling errors such as “experimece,” “thsi,” and “definately” are also noticeable. Aim for precise, familiar expressions rather than unusually formal words, and proofread spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a reason clause beginning “The primary reason why…” and a sentence introduced by “Whenever.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but errors in sentence construction, verb forms, articles, and punctuation occur across the letter. For example, “I am writing to inquire you that” has an incorrect grammatical pattern, and “I can also watering the plants” uses the wrong verb form. In “I am eligible for part time job,” the article is missing, while several sentences use commas where a full stop or clearer clause structure is needed. Practise accurate patterns such as “I am writing to ask whether…” and check each sentence for a complete, correctly formed verb phrase.

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