Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In numerous states the paying for things using mobile phone apps is becoming developing common . This devlopment have more advantages or more disadvantages, Some people argued that this is common in devloping states. Using mobile apps is having lot of benifits , paying utility bills done online shopping and other many bills are paying on mobile phone . This is because using different apps we can done our task at home , with saving our time and money, and very eassily , without facing any difficulty. We have done our work on smart way like using our mobile phones . Furthermore , we can save time , people having many problems to doing their work on physically , such as for paying bills in office , many people gatherd there, they are waitng for their trun so many time weste some time they still waiting for but failed due to huge rush of people , Some time they quralled with one an other,this is because people can frestrate , So in the light of my personal experience keep away from these places , stay cool at home or best place which you like and do your work on using this apps , by safty.

Secondly cash delivery having a risk.

Every things has positive and negetives asspect, one drow back is card user having net problem , some time we buy the things on street hocker they are not having this facility to use machine . Threr are also other drawback signal problem and chance of forget password and stole.

To sumup , people can use it by safty and havig many advantages.So person can having both and use to availability.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the question by presenting mobile payments as beneficial overall and mentioning drawbacks such as internet or signal problems, password loss, and limited access to payment machines among street vendors. However, your position is not consistently clear: the opening repeats the question rather than stating your view, and the conclusion says people can “having both” without clearly weighing the advantages against the disadvantages. The benefits of saving time and avoiding queues are relevant, but they are repeated more than developed, and the risks are listed with little explanation. To strengthen the response, state directly that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, then explain and support each main point with a specific example, such as a bill payment completed through an app and a situation where connectivity prevents payment.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some organisation: the response moves from convenience to drawbacks and ends with a conclusion, and signposts such as “Furthermore,” “Secondly,” and “To sum up” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, progression is difficult to follow because several ideas are crowded into one long paragraph, and the first section shifts between saving time, queues, frustration, and personal advice without clear links. “Secondly” introduces cash delivery, but this point is not explained or connected to the main argument. Some linking phrases are repetitive or do not clarify the relationship between ideas. Use separate paragraphs for your position and advantages, disadvantages, and conclusion; keep each paragraph focused on one main idea and connect examples directly to it.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “utility bills,” “online shopping,” “signal problem,” and “password,” so the reader can identify the subject and several key points. However, the range is limited and many expressions are repeated, especially references to saving time and doing work through apps. Frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word combinations sometimes make the message harder to understand, as in “developing common,” “huge rush of people,” and “cash delivery having a risk.” Aim for more precise topic vocabulary and check spelling carefully. For example, describe “long queues” and “payment security risks,” and use “mobile payments” consistently rather than repeatedly referring to “doing our work” on apps.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example with “This is because” and “Furthermore,” but the response relies heavily on basic structures, and many longer sentences are difficult to follow. Errors in verb forms and agreement occur throughout: “This development have,” “we can done,” and “people can having” do not form accurate clauses. Articles and sentence boundaries are also often missing or misplaced, particularly in the opening and the extended sentence about people waiting to pay bills. These problems can make the intended meaning unclear. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with one clear subordinate clause. Check subject–verb agreement, verb forms after modal verbs (“can pay”), and punctuation to prevent run-on sentences.

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