Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Many nations have been digitalised in last few years it has increased dependency on the phone but along with that it has saved a lot of time.

First of all, I belive that cell phones are good invention of the world it has made many things possible and easy in everyday life as we are talking about payments before this we use to carry a lot of money in our pockets and their were high chances of losing that currency by theif or it fells down from pocket, which has been decreased nowadays and people think its easy for them to manage their rupee well as online payments have their records in their app earlier which we have to keep a note of and that use to make an lot of work in month end.

Secondly, yes the feel of that money going out from the pocket is gone now days people dont have value of money as its not fellable anymore and even dependency on cellphones have increased as people have stopped carrying cash with them which may end up creating some problems of them even person some time is not smart enough that he/she can be saved from online fraud which is highly trending nowdays.

At last but not the least i would like to say their are more benefits of having an smart phone apps helping us to pay for our daily life as it makes it easy for everyone to make payments track their cost of living and make life little bit husstle free.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both advantages and disadvantages, ultimately taking a clear position. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the point about 'losing currency' is a valid advantage, but the discussion on disadvantages, such as 'online fraud' and the 'lack of value of money,' is underdeveloped and lacks specific examples or deeper analysis. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your arguments with more detailed explanations or concrete real-world examples to demonstrate a more thorough exploration of the topic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. You use basic cohesive devices like 'First of all,' 'Secondly,' and 'At last but not the least.' However, the flow within paragraphs is sometimes hindered by long, run-on sentences and awkward phrasing, such as 'which has been decreased nowadays and people think its easy.' The use of referencing is occasionally unclear, making some sentences difficult to parse. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring each sentence connects logically to the next would improve the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. You rely on basic terms like 'good invention' and 'make things possible.' There are also some noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'fells down from pocket' instead of 'falls out of a pocket' and 'the feel of that money... is not fellable.' While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of more sophisticated or topic-specific vocabulary limits the score. Try to incorporate more precise terminology related to digital finance and consumer behaviour.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('it has made many things... as we are talking'), punctuation errors (missing commas and run-on sentences), and incorrect verb forms ('we use to carry' instead of 'we used to carry'). These errors are frequent and occasionally require the reader to re-read to understand the intended meaning. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, punctuation, and consistent verb tense usage before attempting more complex structures.

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