Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
NOWADAYS , IN MANY COUNTIES, MOBILE PHONE APP IN NOW COMMANLY USED REGULARLY, INDIA IS DIGITAL USE MOST PORBABLIY VERY HIGH , PAYING THINGS USING MOBILE PHONE APPS IS BEACOMING HIGH .
FIRST PARAGRAPH , PEOPLE NOW DAYS USED FAST TRANSACTION SAFE TRANSACTION , I AM USING EVERY APP IN MOBILE LIKE , ONLINE SHOPPING , ONLINE PAYING BILL , ONLINE FOOD ORDER , IT IS EASY TO BUY AT HOME , ITS IS LESS TIME CONSUMING , IN FAST LIFE ITS VERY HELPFULL TO PEOPLE , I CAN BUY MY EVERY SHOPPING FOR EXAMPLE, I AM IN OFFICE MY DAILY SHOPPING GLOCERY ORDER ONLINE FROM APP. ITS HELPFULL TO BUSY PEOPLE.
SECOND PARAGRAPH, SOME PEOPLE DONT LIKE TO BUY ONLINE SHOPPING. THEY LIKE TO LOCAL SHOPPING N SEARCHING NEW LOCATION AND BUY NEW DIFFERENT PRODUCT , DISADVANGE OF MOBILE PHONE ONLINE APP IS NOT SAFELY SOME TIMES ,ONLINE PAYING ISSUE FACE TO PEOPLE, PEOPLE LIKE DAILY SHOPPING THEY DONT LIKE ONLINE SHOPPING .
YES ITS VERY IMPORTANT FOR MORDERN LIFE IN MOBILE PHONE IS VERY HELPFULL NOW DAYS . FOR EXAMPLE MOBILE USE IN EVERY SITUATION , ONLINE APP CAN HELP OUR WORK EASLIY AND IN OUT OF COUNTRY YOU CAN ORDER FOOD FOR FAMILY , IT IS USED ANY COUNTY , I SEND TO CAKE FOR MY FAMILY TO UK FROM ONLINE APPLICATION . YES PAYING FOR THINGS IS VERY VALUBLE IN OUR LIFE .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the advantages and disadvantages of mobile payment apps. However, the development of ideas is limited and often repetitive. The essay fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the depth of the argument. The position is clear, but the supporting examples are brief and lack the necessary elaboration to reach a higher band. To improve, you should expand on your points with more detailed explanations and ensure you meet the minimum length requirement to allow for a more comprehensive discussion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'online' and 'it is'. There is a lack of sophisticated linking words to connect ideas between and within sentences. The paragraphing is present but does not effectively guide the reader through a structured argument. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of transition signals (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'on the other hand') to create a smoother flow between your points.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, often relying on simple terms like 'good', 'helpful', and 'buying'. There are frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'counties' instead of 'countries', 'commanly', 'porbabliy', 'glocery', 'valuble') that occasionally make the text difficult to follow. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas with precision. To improve, try to incorporate more topic-specific vocabulary related to digital technology and finance, and pay closer attention to spelling and word formation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement, incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles (e.g., 'I am using every app in mobile', 'paying for things is very valuble'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with excessive use of commas and capitalization errors. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors prevents the text from reaching a higher band. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common grammatical slips.
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