Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Nowadays, Technology makes human life more easier as compare to past.All the people completely depends on it. Without teachnology , Nobody would survive . Using mobile phone apps is becoming increasingly common.In this essay, I will discuss both advantages and disadvantages in following paragraphs.
On the one side, Mobile phone has many advantages . It makes everyone life easier. Many people are using phone for communication.For instance , If parents want to talk with their children living in abroad, they can easily do video call . It does not effect where they are. Instead of it, It is also source of earning money. People are making reels on instagrams and putting storis on snapchat to earn profits. Children are also using this for study purposes.They can easily search any topic on internet . It is best source of entertainment also. People can watch different movies and webseris in their free time.
There are some drawbacks which can not be neglected. Most of children spent a lot of time on mobile phone . It has negative effects on their health. They do not like to play outdoor games which are good for their health. They only prefer online games. Due to this, They do not have time to do study. Secondly, It also reduces relationships.To explain it more, all people are spending time on mobile phone so they do not have enough time to spend with their family and children . Due to this, their bonds are becoming weak.
In conclusion, although it has many positive effects but negative effects of it can not be neglcted. So, people have to balance their life. It depends on it how they want to use it.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response attempts to address the prompt regarding the advantages and disadvantages of paying with mobile phone apps, although the student interprets mobile phone apps broadly to mean smartphones and mobile technology in general rather than strictly mobile payment applications. The position is stated in the introduction, where the writer mentions that they will discuss both advantages and disadvantages. Ideas are presented, such as communication, entertainment, and health impacts on children, but they remain somewhat under-developed and general. For example, the argument that mobile phones reduce relationships is stated simply without deep elaboration. While the task is addressed, a more focused discussion on mobile payment apps specifically would have elevated the task response. Overall, the ideas are relevant to the broader topic of mobile technology, earning a Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay has a recognizable structure with an introduction, body paragraphs for advantages and disadvantages, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different main ideas. However, progression and cohesion are sometimes faulty and mechanical. The writer relies on basic cohesive phrases such as 'On the one side', 'Instead of it', 'Secondly', and 'In conclusion'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, as seen in sentences like 'It does not effect where they are' and 'It depends on it how they want to use it', where pronoun reference is ambiguous. While the overall arrangement is coherent, the frequent awkward transitions and mechanical links place this response at Band 5.5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task but shows limited flexibility and contains noticeable errors in word choice and spelling. Examples of spelling and usage errors include 'teachnology' instead of 'technology', 'storil' or 'storis' instead of 'stories', 'webseris' instead of 'web series', and 'effect' instead of 'affect'. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'entertainment', 'purposes', and 'neglected', but the range remains basic and repetitive with frequent lexical inaccuracies that occasionally strain the reader, aligning closely with Band 5.0 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response exhibits a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentence forms, though control is inconsistent. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('all the people completely depends', 'Most of children spent'), articles ('living in abroad'), and sentence fragments or run-on structures ('Nowadays, Technology makes human life more easier as compare to past.All the people completely depends on it.'). Punctuation errors, such as missing spaces after commas and periods, are pervasive throughout the text. While meaning is generally communicated despite these flaws, the high frequency of basic grammatical and punctuation errors restricts the score to a Band 5.0.
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