Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowdays, purchasing smart phone modern apps become more populer. Although it has many advantages. Yet, some serious drawback as well. We Will elaborate both merits and demerit of the given statement in the upcoming paragraphs.

To commence, the main advantage of the buying application of the phone is that it make humans life easy. To explain it further, people buy such apps to fullfil their needs online rather than going there and do things physically. For example, there are so many applicatons such as zomato, Uber eats , that can delivered food at home by just paying it online.This mathod can save time and money at the same time, also open opportunities for the employement. Another merit of purchasing this application is that it makes people life so easy and save lot of time.To make it clear, there are some app that can provide online services that people can do it in the split second. For example, phone pay application by using this people can pay their light bills, phone bills, and recharge tv subscriptions as well.Hence, paying for things online make life easy.

On the other side there is a disadvantage of it. The main demerit of it that overtime period people become lazy. In addition to, people use all this application for almost all the task. such as buying chocolates from next door store they use their phone application rathter than going by themsalves that cause obesity and throughout timeperiod that become habbit.For example , One of my Friend used to be in very good body shape, but after having this application he always order junk food online, as result he hardly go outside of his house that turned into his lazziness.Thus, using online application very much can make people lazy.

To conclude,buying things online very much have concern of becoming lazy person, but there are more benefits of it such as make life easy and can save time with right amount of use of this online apps.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The candidate addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of paying with mobile phone apps, presenting a clear position throughout. Ideas are supported with relevant, albeit simple, examples, such as mentioning specific apps like 'Zomato', 'Uber Eats', and 'phone pay'. However, some ideas are repetitive, particularly the notion that apps 'make life easy' and 'save time', which is reiterated across multiple paragraphs without significant extension. The development of disadvantages focuses primarily on laziness and lack of physical activity, which is relevant and understandable. While the task is adequately addressed, the overall depth of exploration remains somewhat limited, which places the response comfortably at Band 6.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with clear paragraphing, dividing the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion appropriately. Transitional markers such as 'To commence', 'On the other side', and 'To conclude' are used to guide the reader through the text. However, cohesion is at times faulty and mechanical, with abrupt transitions and minor structural awkwardness, such as starting a sentence with 'Yet, some serious drawback as well.' Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the mechanical repetition of ideas impacts the smooth progression of thought. Paragraphing is present and logically separates the advantages from the disadvantages, but the overall management of cohesive devices aligns best with a Band 5.5 or 6.0 descriptor.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The lexical resource used is adequate for the task, but contains noticeable errors in spelling, word choice, and form. Examples of errors include 'Nowdays', 'populer', 'mathod', 'employement', 'habbit', and 'lazziness'. The student attempts less common vocabulary, such as 'subscriptons' and 'obesity', but control is inconsistent. While the vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the central arguments clearly, frequent spelling mistakes and awkward collocations (e.g., 'purchasing this application' instead of 'using this application') prevent the response from achieving a higher score, making Band 5.0 an accurate reflection of the lexical limitations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay features a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, though attempts at complex structures frequently contain errors. Examples of grammatical inaccuracies include subject-verb agreement issues ('smart phone modern apps become', 'it make humans life easy', 'there are some app that can provide'), punctuation errors, and sentence fragments (e.g., 'Yet, some serious drawback as well.', 'We Will elaborate both merits and demerit'). Furthermore, run-on sentences and awkward phrasing appear throughout the text (e.g., 'One of my Friend used to be in very good body shape, but after having this application he always order junk food online, as result he hardly go outside of his house that turned into his lazziness.'). These frequent errors can cause some difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 5.0 descriptors.

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