Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this digital era, there are many apps in our mobiles which cannot fuse free they are required purchasing process. This trend is growing day by day. I can say that this development is good for those people who waste their precious time on gaming and other stuff. However, some students take crucial benefits from learning apps for their study but they cannot purchase these apps.

first we talk about advantages of the digital apps, From all over the world there are many needy students who cannot afford their tuition fee. They can take significat help from learning apps. These apps help to them to understand their learning absticals with the help of images and vedios. If all learning apps are required money in terms of use. Then i believe that there are ample of learners in the globe who want subjective information and assistant but cannot afford them. I think learning apps should be free.

On the other hand every soome apps shoulod be costly and ristricted such as gamimg and entertainment ones. Because of free apps youngsters cannot focus on their school studies. They can download easily and spen hours and hours on their apps. Sometimes parents unaware about their children activities. There are many incidents happend in our daily lives children engage with criminal mind people through these apps. For example, As per a survay there are a plethora of teenagers found envolve in wrong functions through these apps and harm their own lives for in other persons influence.

In conclusion,A

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You discuss possible benefits and risks of apps, including learning support for students and the danger of young people spending too much time on entertainment or encountering harmful people. However, the response only partially addresses the question: it focuses mainly on whether apps should be free or paid, rather than weighing the advantages and disadvantages of paying for things with mobile phone apps. Your opening also gives a mixed position, and the conclusion is unfinished (“In conclusion,A”), so your overall answer is not made clear. The examples are relevant to app use but are broad and not sufficiently explained. To strengthen the response, state directly whether mobile payments have more advantages or disadvantages, then develop reasons and examples that specifically concern paying by phone.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and phrases such as “On the other hand” signal a contrast. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the discussion shifts from mobile payments to paid learning apps and then to free entertainment apps. The opening’s position is also hard to connect to the body paragraphs, while the final sentence stops before completing the conclusion. Some linking is mechanical or inaccurate, as in “first we talk about advantages” and “Because of free apps.” Improve coherence by keeping each paragraph focused on one aspect of the actual question, using clear topic sentences, and ensuring that the conclusion restates your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt some topic-related and less common vocabulary, including “precious time,” “crucial benefits,” “afford,” and “influence.” This gives you some range, but control is inconsistent: several misspellings and imprecise expressions make parts of the response difficult to understand, such as “learning absticals,” “significat help,” and “wrong functions.” Some phrases are also unnatural or unclear, including “cannot fuse free” and “subjective information and assistant.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. For this topic, use precise terms such as “mobile payments,” “digital transactions,” “convenience,” and “security risks,” rather than discussing apps in general.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both short statements and attempts at longer sentences, for example, “They can take significat help from learning apps” and the conditional structure beginning “If all learning apps are required money.” However, the longer constructions are often faulty, and frequent errors in sentence formation, articles, agreement, and punctuation can make meaning unclear. Examples include “there are many apps in our mobiles,” “These apps help to them,” and “Sometimes parents unaware about their children activities.” Capitalisation and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, particularly in “first we talk about advantages of the digital apps, From all over the world…” and the incomplete ending. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses and proofread each sentence for a complete subject and verb.

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