Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sunny,

I am happy to hear that you have finally decided to go on a camping holiday this summer. I am sure you would love this free time with your family. You deserve a day off since you worked so hard these days. Taking a break in between the weeks will make you feel relaxed and energetic.

I advise you to check the weather before a day so you can change your plan in case of any catastrophic events such as heavy rainfall or storms. Be careful on choosing your overnight stay because you never know if there is a danger of animals or anything. You can search such information by a web.

I would love to join you in this trip. When are you planning to go and who is coming with you? My wife and I are interested to join you for this trip if you don't mind.

Please feel free to let me know. We can plan some other time if you would like to spend this trip with your family.

Thank you

Kind regards,

Vaibhav

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response5.5
Coherence and Cohesion6.0
Lexical Resource6.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy6.0
Overall6.0

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The letter responds to all three bullet points: you give reasons your friend may enjoy a break, mention weather and animal-related risks, and say that you and your wife would like to join. The invitation is clear, and the closing also politely allows for the possibility that your friend prefers a family trip. However, the enjoyment point is not fully tailored to camping: “free time with your family” and feeling “relaxed and energetic” could apply to any holiday, so add specific attractions such as outdoor activities or time around a campfire. The disadvantages are also brief and framed mainly as warnings rather than explaining what could make camping uncomfortable. Developing these ideas more clearly would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: it opens with a response to your friend’s plans, moves to advice and possible risks, and then discusses joining the trip. Paragraphing helps the reader follow these stages, and questions such as “When are you planning to go?” create a natural personal tone. Some connections between ideas are less smooth, however. The shift from recommending a break to checking for “catastrophic events” is abrupt, and “Please feel free to let me know” followed by “We can plan some other time” repeats the invitation’s closing function. Use a clearer transition into the practical cautions and combine the final points to make the ending more concise.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for a friendly advice letter, including relevant terms such as “camping holiday,” “heavy rainfall,” “storms,” and “overnight stay.” The meaning is generally clear, and the tone is appropriately polite. Some choices are imprecise or do not sound natural in context: “free time” is vague for describing the appeal of camping, “catastrophic events” is overly dramatic for ordinary weather risks, and “search such information by a web” is not idiomatic. Aim for more precise, natural collocations and vocabulary specific to outdoor activities. This would make your advice sound more fluent while retaining the accessible style needed for a letter to a friend.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The letter includes a mix of simple statements and more complex forms, such as “I advise you to check the weather before a day so you can change your plan in case…” and “if you would like to spend this trip with your family.” Most sentences are understandable, and errors rarely obstruct the message. Some grammatical patterns need attention: “Be careful on choosing” should use a different preposition and verb form, while “My wife and I are interested to join” needs a more suitable construction. The sentence beginning “I am sure you would love this free time” is also awkwardly structured for the intended meaning. Practise verb patterns after adjectives and advice expressions, and check that each sentence expresses its intended relationship clearly.

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