Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Meeral,

hope you will doing well

so you want to go on a camping Holiday for the first time in your life, i think you will enjoy this camping as i have experienced alot of camping holiday and i know you will love to see those scenic views and hiking in those beautiful lush green mountains and in the night sitting in a calm and peacefull environment beside a bonfire and the stars in the sky, it will be a wonderful experience for you.

there is also some disadvantage like you have to go on hike to reach the destination it will make you very tired and then after reaching the spot there is no water there so you have to go further more for water as you will have to cook a meal for yourself and also there is no toilet so you have to go inside the jungle for this.

i would love to go on camping this summer and will enjoy your company this time also i hope you will enjoy mine too.

truely your's

Salman.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address all three required points: you explain that your friend may enjoy the mountain scenery, hiking and evenings by a bonfire, mention practical drawbacks, and clearly say, “i would love to go on camping this summer.” These details make the letter relevant and give it a personal purpose. However, the reasons and disadvantages are mostly listed rather than developed; for example, you could explain what makes the scenery or shared activities especially enjoyable, and offer practical advice about water or toilet arrangements. The invitation is clear, but the letter would feel more complete with a warmer opening and a more natural closing. Overall, the main ideas are present, though some remain limited or unclear in their development.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response follows a sensible broad order: it first discusses the benefits, then the disadvantages, and finally answers whether you would go. This helps the reader identify the three parts of the task. However, most of the letter is written as long, loosely connected sentences, especially the opening paragraph and the list of disadvantages. Connectors such as “and,” “then” and “also” are repeated, while punctuation does not clearly separate the ideas. The shift from the benefits to the drawbacks could be signalled more smoothly, and paragraphing could make each purpose clearer. Use shorter sentences and clearer links—for example, “However, there are a few challenges”—to create more consistent progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “scenic views,” “lush green mountains,” “bonfire” and “destination,” which helps convey the camping experience. There is also enough variety to describe both attractions and practical difficulties. However, several choices and spellings are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “peacefull,” “alot,” “go on hike,” and “go further more for water.” These errors make the language less precise and sometimes slow the reader, even though the intended meaning is generally understandable. Aim for accurate collocations and spelling, and choose expressions that sound natural in a friendly letter. For instance, “go hiking” and “collect more water” would express your ideas more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas using longer sentences and clauses, but control is inconsistent, and many sentences contain errors. The opening, “hope you will doing well,” has an incorrect verb form and lacks a subject; “you have to go on hike” also needs an article and a more accurate grammatical pattern. In the final paragraph, “i would love to go on camping” uses an incorrect preposition, and the sentence joins several ideas without clear punctuation. Capitalisation and sentence boundaries are also unreliable. These problems sometimes make the reader work to follow the message. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then build longer sentences with clear punctuation and correct verb forms.

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