Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sam,

I hope you are doing well. I have received your letter yesterday and its good to hear that you are going on summer vacations this year. This would be your first time when you are preparing this holiday trip, I would like to suggest some significant guidelines during your trip.

First of all, you will definitely enjoy it because you will get a break from your hectic work routine. Additionally, camping under the night sky would leave a soothing and calm effects on your mind which you will never find in city life. I have heard that your group will try Triuend Track this year which will give you an experience of lush green valleys and picturesque view of majestic mountains. You will have the chance to capture those moments.

However, don't assume this trip is a easy one specially if you are going to Truined for camping. The temperature will go down during night and you will fell extreme cold so don't forget to bring some warm cloths mainly wind breaker jacket.

If possible I would like to join the trip as I am also on one week break form my work. Let me know if your organizer can adjust me in the group. That would be a great fun for both of us.

Let me know what kind of details your organizer may need to accommodate me on this trip. I look forward to your response.

Warm Regards

Dany

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you explain that camping offers a break from work and peaceful night skies, mention cold temperatures as a disadvantage, and clearly say you would like to join Sam. The specific reference to the track and mountain scenery also makes the advice feel personal. This meets the task well, while the explanation of disadvantages is less fully developed than the reasons for enjoying the trip: you focus mainly on the cold and could add another practical challenge, such as carrying equipment or limited facilities. The invitation to join is clear, though the request about whether the organizer can accommodate you shifts attention slightly from advice to arrangements. More balanced development would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear progression from greeting and context to reasons for enjoying camping, a disadvantage, and your wish to join. Paragraphing supports this sequence, and transitions such as “First of all,” “Additionally,” and “However” help the reader follow the contrast. The closing also suits a friendly letter. Some links are a little mechanical, and the final two paragraphs repeat the request for information about joining: “Let me know if your organizer can adjust me” is followed by another request for details. Combining these would make the ending more concise. Overall, the organisation is clear and logical, with room for more flexible linking and tighter control of repeated ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for a friendly letter and make some effective descriptive choices, including “hectic work routine,” “soothing and calm,” “lush green valleys,” and “majestic mountains.” These details help convey why the trip could be appealing. There are also several inaccurate or unnatural choices that reduce precision, such as “summer vacations,” “a easy one,” “fell extreme cold,” and “cloths.” The track name is also spelled inconsistently (“Triuend” and “Truined”), which may confuse the reader. Aim for natural collocations and check spelling and word forms carefully; for example, describe the night as “peaceful” and say that temperatures “drop” and you may “feel very cold.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including a reason clause in “because you will get a break” and a conditional in “If possible I would like to join.” Most ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical errors occur. In “I have received your letter yesterday,” the finished time calls for the past simple; “its good” needs the contraction “it’s”; and “a easy one” requires “an.” There are also agreement and sentence-pattern problems in “a soothing and calm effects” and “you will fell extreme cold.” Review tense choice with time expressions, articles, subject–verb agreement, and punctuation after introductory phrases. More consistent accuracy across these structures would improve control.

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