Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Alex,

I am happy to hear that you finally decided to go for a camping holiday. I am sure you would enjoy your holiday with your family. You truely deserve this since you worked for a year without a day off at workplace. This free time will help you to refresh your mind which is essentially needed for your health.

There are few drawbacks that you need to be careful of. You may spend some time in remote area where you would not see any physical store so I advise you to plan your trip carefully and bring all the essentials that you use in your daily lives. You might plan the same trip again if you would like this ones.

I suggest you to carry some games that you can play with your wife and kids such as badminton or board games. I would like to come with you in this trip if you do not mind. We have been working together for 6 years and we have never get chance to do any enjoyable activities together.

Please let me know if I can come with you this time otherwise we can plan the same trip some other time. I look forward to hearing from you.

Thank you.

Kind regards,

Vaibhav

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three required points and maintains a friendly, appropriate purpose. You explain why Alex may enjoy the break, noting that it could “refresh your mind,” describe the lack of shops in remote areas, and clearly say, “I would like to come with you.” These relevant points meet the task well. However, the enjoyment point is mainly about rest rather than the specific appeal of camping, and the disadvantage is limited to access to stores; adding details such as weather, insects, or sleeping outdoors would develop this part. The invitation is clear, but the closing request for permission slightly weakens the otherwise confident offer. More balanced development would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The message has a clear overall sequence: it introduces the holiday, gives a caution, offers practical advice, and ends with an invitation and closing. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and phrases such as “There are few drawbacks” and “I would like to come with you” guide the reader. Some links between ideas are less clear, however. “You might plan the same trip again if you would like this ones” interrupts the discussion of disadvantages, and the final sentence repeats the idea of planning the trip again without a clear reason. The letter would progress more smoothly if each paragraph focused on one task point and the repeated planning idea were replaced with a direct, natural transition.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for a friendly letter, including relevant expressions such as “remote area,” “essentials,” “refresh your mind,” and “enjoyable activities.” The meaning is generally clear, and the tone is suitable. Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, though: “at workplace,” “in this trip,” and “plan the same trip again” do not express the intended ideas naturally. There is also a spelling error in “truely.” These issues do not prevent understanding, but they limit precision and naturalness. Aim to learn common combinations such as “at work,” “come on the trip,” and “take another trip,” and check spelling before finishing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The letter includes a mix of simple and more developed sentence forms, including the relative clause “which is essentially needed for your health” and conditional structures such as “if you do not mind.” Most ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical errors occur. For example, “There are few drawbacks” needs an article, “I suggest you to carry” uses an incorrect verb pattern, and “we have never get chance” has an incorrect verb form and missing article. The conditional “if you would like this ones” is also not formed accurately. Review verb patterns after “suggest,” present perfect forms, and article use. Greater accuracy in these areas would make the message smoother while preserving its range.

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