Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear sejal,

I hope you are in good health . I am writing this letter to you. I advice you

because you are going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer.

I think you would enjoy a camping holiday. In summer time very comfortable days that time lot of spas on a way and every needed item give easy way. you shoud take cer of your self. Furthermore,In summer very hot time so you shoud carry medition box and water.you will doing outdoor activities such as a hiking and fishing. you will enjoying beautiful natural scenery.you can exploring new places, enjoy fresh air and quality time whith friends.

I think in summer you faces some problems such as uncomfortable sleeping arrangements,weather can be uncomfortable. you may also face problems with mosquitoes and insects.

I would love to join you this summer becauses it would be wonderfull opportunity to spend time with you.

Your lovingly,

Ankita

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address all three points: you give reasons your friend may enjoy camping, mention disadvantages such as uncomfortable sleeping arrangements and insects, and clearly say, “I would love to join you this summer.” However, the reasons for enjoyment are not always clear or fully explained; for example, “lot of spas on a way” is difficult to understand, and the advice about carrying medicine and water is not linked clearly to the benefits. The disadvantages are relevant but brief. The response is also 147 words, so it falls three words short of the 150-word minimum; the 11 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop each point with a little more explanation and ensure the letter meets the required length.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a recognisable structure: an opening, a paragraph about the benefits, one about possible problems, and a closing that answers whether you would go. This makes the overall arrangement coherent. You also use linking expressions such as “Furthermore” and “because” to connect ideas. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear, particularly “Furthermore,In summer very hot time,” and several ideas in the benefits paragraph run together without clear sentence boundaries. The opening repeats its purpose (“I am writing this letter to you. I advice you”) rather than moving directly into the advice. Use clearer sentence breaks and connect each reason to the next more naturally to improve progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “outdoor activities,” “hiking,” “fishing,” “natural scenery,” “fresh air,” and “mosquitoes and insects.” These choices help communicate the camping context. However, the range is limited, and several word choices or collocations make meaning unclear, such as “lot of spas on a way,” “every needed item give easy way,” and “quality time whith friends.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “shoud,” “medition,” and “wonderfull.” Aim for accurate, natural phrases and check spelling carefully; for example, explain what facilities or supplies are available rather than using unclear wording. More precise vocabulary would make your advice easier to follow.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a sentence listing activities and another describing possible problems. However, the range of structures is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to understand. Examples include “I advice you,” “In summer time very comfortable days,” “you will doing outdoor activities,” and “you will enjoying beautiful natural scenery.” These show problems with verb forms, missing subjects or verbs, and sentence construction. There are also issues with articles and punctuation, as in “such as a hiking” and the missing space after “Furthermore,”. Practise complete sentence patterns and verb forms such as “you will enjoy” and “you may face,” then proofread for sentence boundaries.

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