Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Raman,

I hope your doing well. I feel very happy when I saw your letter you are decide to go on camping in these holidays

I think a person have to explore the nature because with this they get know about the different animals and tress. When I did the camping I enjoyed it very much although it is my first camping trip. In the modern era we are using mobile phone alot. We are spending our important time on the internet that is wrong to some limit but over their is no internet we have to do only handful activities so these things you will enjoy.

There is some disadvantages you should take care from the insect if they bit you you will get itch and also stay with your friends if you get lost it is become difficult to find due to poor internet.

Your friend,

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining the benefits of camping, mentioning disadvantages, and confirming your interest in joining. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited. For instance, the explanation of why your friend would enjoy camping is somewhat vague, focusing on 'exploring nature' without specific examples. The disadvantages are also briefly mentioned, and the final point about joining your friend is missing entirely, as you only mention your own past experience rather than explicitly stating whether you would like to go with them this summer. To improve, ensure each bullet point is fully expanded with clear, relevant details.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your structure. However, the flow between sentences is often disjointed due to a lack of cohesive devices. For example, the transition between discussing mobile phones and the lack of internet is abrupt. You rely on simple sentence structures, which makes the progression of ideas feel mechanical. Using linking words such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'on the other hand' would help connect your thoughts more naturally and improve the overall logical flow of the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for a simple letter, but it lacks the range and precision required for a higher band. You use basic terms like 'happy', 'wrong', and 'difficult'. There are also some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'do the camping' (should be 'go camping') and 'over their is no internet' (should be 'there is no internet'). To improve, try to incorporate more descriptive adjectives and topic-specific vocabulary related to outdoor activities to make your writing more engaging and precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'I hope your doing well' (should be 'you're'), 'you are decide' (should be 'you have decided'), and 'if they bit you' (should be 'bite'). You rely almost exclusively on simple sentence structures. While you attempt to express complex ideas, the lack of control over verb tenses and subject-verb agreement significantly affects the accuracy of your writing. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like subject-verb agreement will help you achieve a higher score.

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