Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear john

how are you? hope you are doing well. I am glad to hear from you that you planed to go to a camping site in this summer. Indeed, i am happy to give you some suggestions for this activity.

last summer i visited to a camping site known as hill site spot in Himachal. Although, it is a crowded place, you would extermely love this place as it has a special parks for camping with full of natural views which would give you relaxation from your hectic schedule. Moreover, this site provide all the necessary equipment and i know you like fishing. Fortunately, there is also a spot for fishing as well.

I would like to let you know about some benefits of camping here. firstly, you would get a sufficient discount on necessary things if you are a group of four people. secondly, they provide breakfast for free. moreover, there is a medical services at this place for taking advantages in an emergency. Since, i am also off this summer and i would like to join you guys for this fun together.

I hope you would plan accordingly and i would look forward to hearing from you soon.

your lovingly,

Robert

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You explain why your friend would enjoy camping, mention some disadvantages (though these are somewhat overshadowed by the positive aspects), and confirm your interest in joining. However, the task asks for 'disadvantages,' and you primarily listed benefits like discounts and medical services. To improve, ensure you clearly contrast the pros and cons. For example, you could mention the lack of modern amenities or unpredictable weather as disadvantages. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend, and the purpose is clear throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover,' 'firstly,' and 'secondly' to link your ideas. However, some of these transitions feel a bit mechanical or slightly misused, such as 'Since, i am also off this summer...' which does not connect logically to the previous sentence. The progression of ideas is generally easy to follow, but more varied linking words would improve the flow and make the writing feel more natural.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using words like 'hectic schedule,' 'equipment,' and 'sufficient.' There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'visited to a camping site' (should be 'visited a camping site') and 'taking advantages in an emergency' (should be 'taking advantage of'). While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise usage. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more idiomatic expressions or less common collocations appropriate for an informal letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, including punctuation issues (e.g., 'Although, it is a crowded place,' should not have a comma after 'Although'), capitalization errors ('i' instead of 'I'), and tense inconsistencies ('planed' instead of 'planned'). Additionally, there are some minor subject-verb agreement issues, such as 'this site provide' (should be 'provides'). While these errors are frequent, they do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. Focusing on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and capitalization would significantly improve your score.

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