Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Talwinder,

I hope you are doing well, I am gland to know that you are going for camping.

I think you will have great experience during this summer holidays. You will have fun because you will get a chance to explore natural beauty. You can see beautiful view of sun rise and sun set during your trip.

You can face few demerits during your trip, you can have some allergies to avoid that I suggest you should wear full sleeves. Apart from that you can have sun burn. As you are going first time you could have difficulty to sleep in open area.

You will be happy to know that if my vacation will we approve then I would like to plan to go with you, we can travel for camping together. I believe things will we easy for you if I will join you.

Best wishes

Mandeep Kaur.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You explain why your friend would enjoy camping, mention potential disadvantages like allergies and sunburn, and express your interest in joining them. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited; for instance, the advice on how to handle disadvantages is brief. To improve, you could expand on the 'why' behind your suggestions or provide more specific details about the camping trip to better engage the reader and fully develop your points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your ideas. There is a logical progression from the introduction to the advice, the drawbacks, and finally the closing offer. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and limited. You rely heavily on simple sentence structures and basic transitions. To reach a higher band, try to use a wider variety of linking words and phrases (e.g., 'furthermore', 'on the other hand', 'consequently') to connect your sentences and ideas more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your message clearly. You use some topic-specific words like 'natural beauty', 'sun burn', and 'demerits'. However, there are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'gland' instead of 'glad' and 'going for camping' instead of 'going camping'. The range of vocabulary is somewhat narrow. To improve, try to incorporate more descriptive adjectives and idiomatic expressions that are natural in informal correspondence, such as 'breathtaking scenery' or 'a bit of a challenge'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'if my vacation will we approve' (should be 'if my vacation is approved') and 'things will we easy' (should be 'things will be easy'). There are also issues with punctuation, specifically comma splices in the first paragraph. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensure that you are using correct verb tenses in conditional sentences. Proofreading for small slips will help increase your accuracy.

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