Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.5)
Dear friend,
I hope this letter finds you in radiant health and the best of spirits. I am writing this letter to suggest few places to enjoy your camping holiday.
Moreover, summer is great time to go out side with our friends. There are ample of travel spots where you can go. For example, Kashmir, Jaipur, Goa, and so on. These are renowned state and cities to visit during summer periods. You should on a camping holiday especially on beach area. Because it is the best time rejuvenate mind.
However, there are couple of demerits to on comping. Firstly, it will waste your valuable time. Like, if you avoid to go any trip, then you can use that period to develop your new skills.
Apart from this, I also want to go on a holiday to relax my mind. Because due to my hectic schedule I have tired, and I could not go anywhere with our loved once. Thus, I would like to join you if it is possible.
I look forward to your prompt response. Thank you for your consideration.
Yours faithfully,
Tabassum
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt, which is a positive start. However, the development of your ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, when explaining why your friend would enjoy camping, you list cities like Jaipur and Goa, which are not typically associated with camping in the way the prompt implies. Furthermore, the explanation of disadvantages is quite brief and slightly illogical, as you suggest camping is a 'waste of time' compared to skill development, which contradicts the purpose of a holiday. To improve, ensure your ideas are more relevant to the specific context of camping and provide more detailed, logical support for your points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The letter is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your structure. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'However', and 'Apart from this' to link your ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where the progression of ideas feels disjointed. For example, the transition from suggesting camping spots to discussing the disadvantages of camping is abrupt. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified theme that connects logically to the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. You use some good phrases like 'radiant health' and 'hectic schedule', but there are also several awkward collocations and word choice errors, such as 'ample of travel spots' (should be 'an ample number of' or 'plenty of') and 'demerits to on comping' (should be 'disadvantages of camping'). Additionally, there are minor errors like 'loved once' instead of 'loved ones'. Focusing on learning common collocations and checking for word-form accuracy will significantly improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'suggest few places' (missing an article), 'summer is great time' (missing an article), 'You should on a camping holiday' (missing a verb), and 'I have tired' (incorrect verb form). While the meaning is generally understandable, these recurring errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevent the writing from reaching a higher level of accuracy. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles will be very beneficial.
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