Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Mitali,

I hope you are doing well. I am happy to hear that you are planning to go on a camping holiday for a first time and seek my advice.

I believe that you will definitely enjoy summer holiday, as you will get an opportunity to meet new people and make a new friends. Additionally, camping authorities will offers you an adventurous activities like swimming, trekking and tree climbing. Also, explore natural environment and get a relief from hot summer days by spending time in water activities brings positive and refreshing vibes.

However, you have to be careful regarding unforeseen consequences related to your health, as you discover new atmosphere and sometimes changing meal time could be affect on your immune system. Therefore, try to bring medicine of fever, cough and vomiting and first aid kit for safety concern. Also, after trekking, you maybe experience tiredness, fatigue and body pain, so never forget to bring painkiller tablets.

It would be grateful if we both planning to go for summer camping together in order to spend quality time and enjoy a lot of things. Moreover, provide me information regarding your summer camp schedule, therefore, I will try to arrange vacation leave.

I hope my suggestions will be helpful to you in any way. I look forward to your prompt response in this matter.

Best regards,

Twinkle

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt effectively. You explained the benefits of camping, identified potential health-related disadvantages, and expressed a clear interest in joining your friend. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend, and the purpose is clear throughout. To reach a higher band, ensure that your ideas are developed with slightly more depth; for instance, when discussing disadvantages, you could elaborate on the lack of modern amenities or the unpredictability of weather, rather than focusing primarily on health and medication. Overall, the response is well-focused and meets the requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for each point, and a closing. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Additionally', 'However', and 'Therefore' to link your ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical or repetitive. The paragraphing is appropriate, and the progression of ideas is easy to follow. To improve, try to vary your linking words and ensure that the flow between sentences is more natural, rather than relying on standard transition markers at the start of every sentence.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using words like 'unforeseen', 'adventurous', and 'fatigue'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'camping authorities will offers you' (should be 'offer') and 'it would be grateful if we both planning' (should be 'it would be great if we both planned'). While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise control over word forms and sentence structure. Expanding your vocabulary to include more idiomatic expressions would enhance your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you successfully convey your message, there are several grammatical inaccuracies, such as 'for a first time' (should be 'for the first time'), 'could be affect on' (should be 'could affect'), and 'if we both planning' (should be 'if we both plan'). These errors are frequent but do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of modal verbs. Increasing the variety of complex sentence structures while maintaining accuracy will help you achieve a higher band.

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