Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Amrit,

I hope you are doing well, as you ask me for advice for summer camping because you go there first time, so i want to tell you that if you go for camping trip then you enjoy it very much you can do many activity and enjoy the view of nature as your camping in summer.

I know that you are not a social person but by campign trip you can get a chance to meet a new people and make new friends and it would also be beneficial for your health because there you can do many physical activities.

I also want to join you but due to my exams i can't do this but i'm pretty sure that you will enjoy that trip very much and that will be best m,oment for you in your life and see you soon.

yours lovingly.

komal

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points: explaining why the friend would enjoy camping, describing disadvantages, and stating whether you can join. However, the development of these points is quite limited. The explanation of why they would enjoy it is brief, and the disadvantages are mentioned only in passing without specific examples (e.g., lack of facilities or weather). Furthermore, the response is under the 150-word minimum, which negatively impacts the task achievement score. To improve, you should expand on your ideas with more detail and ensure you meet the word count requirement to fully develop your response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organised into paragraphs, which is good. However, the flow of ideas is somewhat mechanical. There is a lack of varied cohesive devices; the text relies heavily on simple conjunctions like 'and' or 'because'. The transition between the benefits of camping and the disadvantages is abrupt. To improve, use a wider range of linking words and phrases such as 'Furthermore', 'On the other hand', or 'Consequently' to connect your ideas more fluidly and logically throughout the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'enjoy it very much' and 'do many activities' are used without much variation. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'as your camping in summer' and 'best moment for you in your life'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is limited and does not demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. Try to incorporate more descriptive adjectives and topic-specific vocabulary related to camping to enhance the quality of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentences, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'as you ask me' (should be 'as you asked me'), 'you go there first time' (should be 'it is your first time'), and 'meet a new people' (should be 'meet new people'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with run-on sentences and missing capital letters. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct tense usage, and ensuring each sentence is punctuated correctly to avoid confusion.

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