Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.5)
Dear Ravi,
How are you? I hope you are doing well! I'm hear about that you are doing planning for going on a camping on this summer. I know this very well, it's your first time when you go outside with your friends. Moreover, it's a very special moment for you because these kind of days never come back in your life. So, i really want you enjoy a lot in your this camping and i know feel over the moon when you remember that days.
Due to this camping you also face some hazards like sometimes weather conditions is not in you favour and you also face some health issues. So, be careful about that things while you holiday's vacation.
As i mentioned earlier, you never go alone anywhere. So, i have a great suggestion for you. I'm also free in this summer because my study is completed. If you want i can join you in this trip. There is no problem if you want to go alone, please send your reply ASAP.
See you soon.
With regards,
Dharam Brar
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt: it explains why the friend would enjoy camping, describes potential disadvantages, and offers to join the trip. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of why the friend would enjoy it is quite brief, and the mention of 'hazards' is vague. To reach a higher band, you should provide more specific details, such as mentioning the beauty of nature or the excitement of outdoor activities, and elaborate on the disadvantages like the lack of modern amenities or unpredictable weather.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Moreover', 'Due to this', and 'As I mentioned earlier'. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. Some sentences feel disconnected, and the referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'remember that days'. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph focuses on a single clear theme would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey your message, and the informal tone is generally well-maintained. There are some instances of unnatural word choice, such as 'I'm hear about that' instead of 'I heard that', and 'holiday's vacation', which is redundant. You also use some idiomatic language like 'over the moon', which is good, but it is slightly misused in this context. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that your word choices are precise and natural for the intended context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with verb tenses ('I'm hear about that', 'my study is completed'), subject-verb agreement ('weather conditions is'), and article usage. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader. To improve, pay closer attention to basic sentence construction, particularly verb forms and pluralization. Proofreading your work for these common slips will help you achieve a higher score.
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