Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.5)
Dear Jack,
I am writing this letter to explain you that you need to go to camping in every summer because it's a very beautiful way to explore and live your life, plus you will feel very fresh and charming after camping.
You will enjoy a forest vacation with a big excitement.During trekking you will see a lot of god's creature.Additionally, you can see the sun and moon views which i like the most.In the evening time you have to decide a campground where you will set up you tent to live inside and sleep.
Secondly.there are small effects of doing camping as in the forest areas there are lot of wild animals which can hurt you harmly. So, please take precautions like you have the knife and beer spray with you for safety purpose.
Thirdly, I am planning to go to Elk Island thats kind of beach and forest area.So, we do recreational activities over there. To illustrate, making food with natural resources having another level of taste.
I hope you will accept my instructions and live your life happily.
Regards,
John Brown.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You explain the benefits of camping, identify potential disadvantages (wild animals), and confirm your interest in joining your friend. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the advice regarding safety is a bit simplistic, and the description of the camping trip to Elk Island lacks specific detail. To improve, try to expand on your points with more descriptive language or personal anecdotes to fully develop your ideas, which would help you move into a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The letter is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Additionally', 'Secondly', and 'To illustrate'. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical or forced, such as 'Thirdly' when introducing a new point that is not strictly a third step in a sequence. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'there are small effects of doing camping', which does not accurately introduce the concept of disadvantages. Improving the flow between sentences would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey your message, but there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors. For example, 'hurt you harmly' is incorrect; 'harmfully' is not the right collocation here. Similarly, 'god's creature' should be capitalized and pluralized as 'God's creatures'. Phrases like 'big excitement' and 'fresh and charming' are slightly unnatural in this context. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and idiomatic expressions that sound more natural to a native speaker.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include missing articles ('go to camping'), incorrect preposition usage ('decide a campground'), and punctuation errors (e.g., 'Secondly.there'). Subject-verb agreement and word order also need attention, such as 'you have the knife and beer spray', which should be phrased as a suggestion or conditional structure. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents a higher score.
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