Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Hi dear

I am writing a letter you will go camping holiday for the summer in Kashmir so I hear about it.it is good time for camping I think you enjoy a lot because there are many activities like hiking cycling and more many activities

Whenever you wil go be careful because there are some light issues in the night no water facility in the camp it's so far from city . Kashmir has difficult from water because it is village.

I like with my friends cycling because very nice weather there and beautiful trees.hicking is also best for walking you seen there lot of natural resources.sky is very clear .I enjoy a lot with my friends I

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses all three bullet points, but the development of ideas is very limited. The explanation of why the friend would enjoy camping is brief, and the description of disadvantages is somewhat unclear due to grammatical issues. Furthermore, the letter is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which negatively impacts the overall task achievement. To improve, you should expand on your points by providing more specific details or examples to meet the length requirement and demonstrate a more thorough engagement with the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks a clear structure or paragraphing. While there is a basic attempt to address the bullet points, the flow of ideas is disjointed. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas together, making the text feel like a series of isolated statements rather than a coherent letter. To improve, use transition words such as 'furthermore', 'however', or 'consequently' to connect your thoughts and organize your response into distinct paragraphs for each bullet point.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'many activities' and 'it is good time' are simplistic and lack the precision expected at higher levels. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'light issues' (likely meaning electricity) and 'Kashmir has difficult from water', which hinders clarity. To improve, try to use more descriptive adjectives and precise nouns related to travel and camping, and focus on using words in their correct collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing articles ('in the camp'), incorrect verb tenses ('Whenever you wil go'), and awkward sentence structures ('I am writing a letter you will go camping'). The punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and periods. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and prepositions.

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