Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Riya,

I hope this letter finds in good health and high spirits. I'm writing this letter to give you some advice regarding camping holiday. Kindly allow me to elaborate on this.

At the outset, I believe doing camping in the month of july would be a better option for you, as you have plenty of options to enjoy your summer vacation. Apart form it, camping will give you some relaxation after hectic weekend and I am ensure this would be a different experience for you.

Furthermore, there are some drawbacks you have to keep in your mind while going on camping. Some places have shortage of water and food, so make sure you can bring all the neccessary items, which would help you to make your holiday more enjoyable and rewarding. Moreover, please check the weather forecast before going on specific place, you won't face any difficulty while travelling.

Additionally, if you want to go with me, I can join you because I will be free next weekend. I think it will be a wonderful opportunity for both of us to enjoy together. Please let me know if you need any further information.

Eagerly waiting for a prompt response from your side.

Your friend,

Raman

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You explained why your friend would enjoy camping, identified potential disadvantages such as water and food shortages, and clearly stated your willingness to join the trip. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend, and the purpose of the letter is clear throughout. To reach a higher band, ensure that your ideas are slightly more developed; for instance, when mentioning the 'shortage of water and food', you could briefly explain why this happens in camping scenarios to add more depth to your advice.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with clear paragraph breaks for each point. You use some cohesive devices such as 'At the outset', 'Furthermore', and 'Additionally' to transition between ideas. However, some of these transitions feel a bit mechanical or slightly unnatural in a personal letter context. The progression of ideas is generally smooth, and the referencing is clear. To improve, try to vary your linking words to sound more natural and less like a formal essay, as this is a friendly correspondence.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message clearly. Phrases like 'hectic weekend' and 'rewarding' are used appropriately. However, there are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'doing camping' (should be 'going camping') and 'on specific place' (should be 'at a specific place'). Additionally, there are a few spelling errors like 'neccessary' (necessary). While these do not impede communication, they prevent the score from being higher. Expanding your range of collocations would help improve your lexical score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are several grammatical slips, such as 'I hope this letter finds in good health' (missing the object 'you') and 'I am ensure' (should be 'I am sure'). There are also minor issues with articles and prepositions, such as 'in the month of july' (should be 'July') and 'on camping' (should be 'camping'). The majority of your sentences are understandable, but more consistent control over basic grammar and punctuation is needed for a higher band.

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