Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mable,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing to express my extreme excitement and a few advice regarding your camping on the coming summer.

Firstly , I am feeling great about the choice you made . Camping has always my comforting way of escaping from the reality. Now, you are about to experience it for the first time.

Some advantages of camping undoubtedly helps us to relax our mental stress by exploring new places. In addition, Communication with many new people during camping can make to calm our body and mind.

However, make sure to get all the necessity items before packing . Because ,it will be harder for you to find items on your way to site seeing .Also , make sure not to trust everyone who accompany you on your journey.

I would like to participate with you for this thrilled journey. However, my work and its pressure brought me to stay at home.

I look forward to hearing from you great newses soon.

Best wishes,

KEE.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining why your friend would enjoy camping, describing potential disadvantages, and stating your availability to join. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the advice regarding 'necessity items' and 'not trusting everyone' is a bit vague and could have been expanded with more specific examples to better fulfill the task requirements. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend, but the response would benefit from more detailed explanations to reach a higher band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your ideas. You use some cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'In addition', and 'However' to link your thoughts. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by awkward phrasing, such as 'I am writing to express my extreme excitement and a few advice'. Additionally, some transitions feel a bit mechanical. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that the relationship between sentences is always clear and natural.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey your message, but there are several instances of unnatural word choice and collocation errors. For example, 'a few advice' should be 'some advice', and 'newses' is not a standard plural form. Phrases like 'comforting way of escaping from the reality' and 'thrilled journey' are slightly off in terms of natural English usage. While your meaning is generally clear, the errors in word formation and collocation prevent a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'Camping has always my comforting way' (missing verb), 'make to calm our body' (incorrect verb structure), and 'items on your way to site seeing' (incorrect terminology). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall clarity and accuracy of your writing.

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