Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sam,

I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing this letter regarding to give advice for camping holiday for this summer. I would like to provide some background information about the camping trip and explain about it. I would also appreciate your attention to this matter.

Firstly, I know you will be enjoy a camping holiday. It would be make you summer holidays special and unforgetable. Secondly, there might be disadvantages behind this phenonmenon, such as finding for hotel because it will expensive to stay there for a week. Moreover, I would like to go for camping with you this summer, it will be great fun and relexing moment to enjoy amd make holidays more special and I will be let you know about my plan for going camping trip.

Thank you for time and consideration. I would greatly appreciate your assistance and look forward to your response.

Best wishes,

Manpreet Chopra

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt, which is a positive start. However, the development of your ideas is quite limited. For example, when describing the disadvantages, you mention 'finding for hotel' and 'expensive to stay there,' which is confusing because camping is usually an alternative to hotels, not a search for one. To improve, you should provide more logical and detailed explanations for your points. The tone is also slightly inconsistent; it reads more like a formal business letter than a friendly note to a friend. Ensure your content is relevant and clearly explained to better meet the requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use basic cohesive devices like 'Firstly,' 'Secondly,' and 'Moreover' to link your ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed, and the connection between ideas is occasionally weak. For instance, the transition in the second paragraph regarding the disadvantages is unclear. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your sentences flow naturally into one another rather than feeling like a list of separate points.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is quite basic and contains several errors. You use words like 'phenonmenon' incorrectly in this context, and there are spelling errors such as 'unforgetable,' 'relexing,' and 'amd.' Additionally, some word choices are unnatural, such as 'finding for hotel.' To improve, try to use more precise vocabulary related to camping and travel, and pay closer attention to spelling and word formation. Expanding your range of descriptive adjectives would also help make your writing more engaging and natural for a letter to a friend.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the letter that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'I know you will be enjoy' (should be 'will enjoy'), 'It would be make you summer' (should be 'would make your summer'), and 'I will be let you know' (should be 'I will let you know'). You rely mostly on simple sentence structures, and your attempts at more complex structures often contain errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic verb tenses and subject-verb agreement. Proofreading your work for small errors like missing articles or incorrect verb forms will significantly improve your score.

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