Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear friend
I hope you doing well today. I am writing this email regarding giving you advice related to your summer holiday camping.
When I was going there I really enjoyed my camping in this place. Groused mountain is really nice as well as adorable for camping with family and friends. There is a lot of activity to do for example hiking. In every we sunset with beautiful view point on mountain additional in morning we can see sunrise.
The demerit of doing camping in summer is insect and mosquitoes there and wildlife animals in night may hurts you . Carry some safety equipment along with you .
Thank you
Best regards
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses all three bullet points: explaining why the friend would enjoy camping, describing disadvantages, and mentioning whether you would join them. However, the ideas are significantly under-developed, and the response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words. The content is quite brief, lacking the necessary detail and expansion expected for a Band 6 or higher. To improve, you must expand on your points—for example, by describing specific activities in more detail or providing a more personal reflection on why you would or would not join your friend.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The letter is logically organized, with each paragraph addressing a specific part of the prompt. However, the use of cohesive devices is very limited and somewhat mechanical. There is a lack of linking words to connect ideas smoothly within sentences. For instance, the transition between the benefits and the disadvantages is abrupt. Improving the flow by using a wider range of cohesive devices (e.g., 'furthermore', 'on the other hand', 'consequently') would help the text read more naturally and improve the overall progression of ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits the ability to convey ideas with precision. Phrases like 'really nice' and 'really enjoyed' are quite generic. There are also some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'wildlife animals' (redundant) and 'in every we sunset' (unclear). To achieve a higher band, you should aim to use more descriptive adjectives and precise nouns related to the topic of camping, such as 'scenic', 'breathtaking', 'potential hazards', or 'essential gear'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity, such as 'I hope you doing well' (missing auxiliary verb) and 'in every we sunset' (incorrect structure). The sentence structures are predominantly simple, with limited attempts at complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and sentence construction. Incorporating a variety of complex sentence structures, such as using relative clauses or conditional sentences, will help demonstrate a wider grammatical range.
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