Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.5)
Dear Kim,
I hope you are doing great. I am writing to provide you a valuable advise for the camping.
To begin with, I personally think that camping is a best time for you to get some break from your busy schedule and would definitely say it is a better way to rejuvenate and relaxation. As I know you love to do hiking and swimming this will include both and more activities. I know you will enjoy it.
However, as you are really allergic due to transformation of weather in that case there are some challenges for you because the weather changes so rapidly for that you should consider summer as well as some winter jacket to protect yourself from cold nights. Apart from this, sometimes some wild animals popped up in front so be aware from them and always stay with the guidance.
Moreover, I am excited to go with you on this camping as it is your first time I will protect you in all situations and will enjoy a lot.
This is a time to say goodbye and I am waiting for your answer.
With love,
Divya.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You explain why your friend would enjoy camping, mention potential disadvantages like weather changes and wildlife, and confirm your willingness to join. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, some ideas are slightly under-developed; for instance, the advice regarding 'transformation of weather' is a bit vague, and the suggestion to 'stay with the guidance' is unclear. To reach a higher band, ensure that your explanations are more precise and fully elaborated to provide a more helpful response to your friend.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on one of the bullet points. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'However', and 'Moreover' to transition between ideas. While the flow is generally easy to follow, some of the linking is a bit mechanical. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'for that you should consider', where the connection to the previous clause is slightly awkward. Overall, the paragraphing is sufficient and the progression of ideas is coherent.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using words like 'rejuvenate', 'challenges', and 'allergic'. However, there are some noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'provide you a valuable advise' (should be 'advice') and 'transformation of weather' (which is not a natural collocation). Additionally, 'popped up' is a bit informal, though acceptable in a friendly letter. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and ensure you distinguish between nouns and verbs, such as 'advice' versus 'advise'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. Examples include 'camping is a best time' (should be 'the best time'), 'relaxation' (should be 'relax'), and 'be aware from them' (should be 'be aware of them'). There are also issues with article usage and prepositional phrases. While these errors do not significantly impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct preposition usage would be beneficial.
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