Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear Smith,
i hope you're doing well. i am writing to tell you about a camping holiday that i visited last time i want to give some vital things about it.
Firstly, i think you enjoy a lot because the holiday will come once in a year. Moreover you can do parties at night with your loved once.
As well, there disadvantages like not ready for the unknown health issues and taking water from anywhere.
that cause us cold make sure you have tablets with you. Also plan the budget according to the trip and that make feel us boring. remember last time when my trip is ongoing my mobile was make sure you have yours in correct place.
Also I am also planning tour with you in this summer because my mother suggested me to go with friends. she told me about her olden holidays days like golden days with that excitement I am deciding to come with you.
Best wishes,
Sam
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining why your friend would enjoy camping, describing disadvantages, and confirming your interest in joining. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited. For example, the explanation of why they would enjoy it is vague, and the section on disadvantages is difficult to follow due to unclear phrasing (e.g., 'not ready for the unknown health issues'). To improve, you should expand on your points with more specific details and clearer explanations to ensure the reader fully understands your perspective.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical flow between and within sentences is often disrupted by grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. While you use some transition words like 'Firstly' and 'Moreover', the connections between ideas are sometimes mechanical or unclear. For instance, the transition 'As well, there disadvantages' is grammatically incorrect and hinders the flow of information. Improving your use of cohesive devices and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one will help you achieve a higher score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally basic and sometimes inaccurate, which occasionally impedes communication. You rely on simple words and struggle with collocations, such as 'visited a camping holiday' (you go on a holiday, not visit one) and 'loved once' (should be 'loved ones'). There are also issues with word choice, such as 'olden holidays days'. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and using more precise vocabulary to express your ideas clearly. Expanding your range of descriptive language will also help make your writing more engaging.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the letter, including issues with subject-verb agreement, sentence structure, and punctuation. For example, 'i think you enjoy a lot' should be 'I think you would enjoy it a lot', and 'my mobile was make sure you have yours' is a fragmented, confusing sentence. You rely mostly on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are often marred by errors. Focusing on basic sentence construction, proper use of articles, and consistent verb tenses will significantly improve the clarity and accuracy of your writing.
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