Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Ram,

How are you? I hope you are doing good. I am delighted to hear that you have enrolled in the two days Mountain climbing camp organized by our school.

This is the best decision you have taken to use the summer holidays effectively by gathering some enriching life experience. I gurantee you that you would enjoy this tour because several types of activities will be there in which you are interested. The events like surviving the two nights in the cave where you have to take care of yourself and your team from the wild animals. Moreover, In the day time instructure will teach you the basic skills of climbing the mountains. I assure you that this tour will change the whole perspective of your life.

However,there are some drawbacks of this events which I would like to give heads up to you. Since you will be in the forest, there is the possibility of biting some life theartening insects, therefore, I would recommend you to keep some first aid box with you while travelling.

Lastly, I would also like to accompany with you in these activities, but I have to attain some family function on the same dates. Hence, It is not possible for me to join this wonderful event. I look forward to hearing from you regarding the overall experience of this camping holidays.

Yours lovingly,

Nilay Shah

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You explained why your friend would enjoy the camping trip, described potential disadvantages, and clearly stated that you cannot join. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the content is slightly misaligned with the prompt; the prompt asks about a 'camping holiday,' but you have interpreted this as a 'mountain climbing camp' organized by a school. While this is a form of camping, it limits your ability to discuss general camping features. To improve, ensure you stick strictly to the scenario provided in the prompt to avoid potential task response issues.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each addressing a specific requirement of the task. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover,' 'However,' and 'Hence' to link your ideas. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical or slightly misused, such as 'Lastly, I would also like to accompany with you.' The referencing is generally clear, and the progression of ideas is easy to follow. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that the flow between sentences feels more natural and less formulaic.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using words like 'enriching,' 'perspective,' and 'accompany.' There are some noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'biting some life theartening insects' (should be 'bites from life-threatening insects') and 'attain some family function' (should be 'attend'). Additionally, there are spelling errors like 'gurantee' and 'instructure.' While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they do indicate a need for more careful proofreading and a better grasp of common collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'I hope you are doing good' (should be 'well'), 'several types of activities will be there in which you are interested' (awkward phrasing), and 'I would also like to accompany with you' (the verb 'accompany' does not take 'with'). Punctuation is generally functional, though there are missing spaces after commas in some places. While your meaning is clear, the frequency of these minor errors prevents a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and preposition usage.

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