Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Jenny,
I hope you doing well, I saw your email stating that you and your friends are going on a camping holiday.
To begin with, I would like to suggest best places for your camping holiday, such as Jasper and Banff in Alberta. As you know Alberta is hub of Rockies. You and your friends will enjoy and have an adventurous experience. It has lots of hiking places.
However, there are some cons while camping in Banff and Jasper. There are wild bears, and moose roaming around freely, which can be unsafe. Secondly, even you are going during summers be prepared with you warm clothes and jackets as during night time it cooler there.
I wish I would join you, but unfortunately as you know I have a weeding to attend in California this summer and the wedding is of a close relative and have to attend it. I hope you enjoy the camping holiday.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You explain why your friend would enjoy camping, identify potential disadvantages (wildlife and weather), and clearly state that you cannot join them. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For example, the explanation of why your friend would enjoy it is brief, and the advice regarding the 'best places' was not specifically requested by the prompt, which asked for advice on the holiday in general. To improve, ensure you expand on your points with more descriptive detail to fully satisfy the 'well-developed' requirement of higher bands.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, each focusing on a specific part of the task. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'However', and 'Secondly' to guide the reader. While the structure is clear, the flow between some sentences is slightly mechanical. Additionally, there are minor issues with referencing and punctuation, such as the comma splice in the opening sentence ('I hope you doing well, I saw your email...'). Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between ideas would help elevate your score in this criterion.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task, using words like 'adventurous', 'roaming', and 'unfortunately'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'hub of Rockies' (should be 'the hub of the Rockies') and 'weeding' (a spelling error for 'wedding'). The phrasing 'be prepared with you warm clothes' is also slightly unnatural. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and ensure your spelling is accurate, as these small errors occasionally distract from the message.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are several grammatical errors throughout the text. For instance, 'I hope you doing well' is missing the auxiliary verb 'are', and 'even you are going' should be 'even though you are going'. There are also issues with article usage ('during night time it cooler there' should be 'at night time it is cooler there'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they occur frequently enough to limit the score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles.
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