Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Riya
How are you? I hope you have wonderful time during this summer. I am writing this to give you some advice regarding the camping such as what activities you can do, and what you should not.
Undoubtedly, it would be delightful experience for you as you love the nature and peaceful atmosphere. You can perform numerous activities at the campsite to make it one the highlights of the life. Moreover, it is not only stress buster for you but also brings peace and prosperity to the fast-paced life. Apart from that, it will break the monotony of the daily life.
However, you need to keep a few things in the mind while you are the camping site. Firstly, do not disturb the natural habitats at the campsite. Secondly, do not spread litter around the area because it will detrimental for the animal living there. Lastly, do not blow fire.
I might not able to join you.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You explained why your friend would enjoy camping, described some disadvantages (though these were framed as 'rules' rather than inherent disadvantages like lack of facilities or weather), and stated your availability. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the 'disadvantages' section focuses on rules for the camper rather than the actual drawbacks of camping, such as sleeping on the ground or lack of electricity. To improve, ensure your points directly answer the specific requirements of the prompt with more depth and relevant examples.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your ideas. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover', 'Apart from that', and 'Firstly' to link your points. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical, and the transition into the final paragraph is very abrupt. The concluding sentence is also quite brief and lacks a natural closing, which affects the overall coherence of the letter. Using a wider variety of linking phrases and ensuring a smoother transition between your advice and your personal availability would improve the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your meaning, such as 'fast-paced life', 'monotony', and 'natural habitats'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'blow fire' (which should be 'build a fire') and 'detrimental for the animal' (which should be 'detrimental to the animals'). Additionally, there are some missing articles, such as 'one the highlights' instead of 'one of the highlights'. While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise vocabulary usage and better attention to common collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'I hope you have wonderful time' (missing article), 'it would be delightful experience' (missing article), 'while you are the camping site' (preposition error), and 'I might not able to join you' (missing verb 'be'). These errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. To reach a higher band, focus on consistent use of articles, correct preposition usage, and ensuring all verb phrases are complete.
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