Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Tolu,

How are you? I hope you are doing well, I’m writing this in response to your plans to go for a camping holiday this summer. I believe you would enjoy this because there are a lot of activities in camp like swimming, hiking, dancing, woodworking. I noticed that your favorite hobby is dancing. In addition, there is a dancing competition that will be held by the camp director and the winner would receive a lot of prizes and a ten-million-naira-cheque.

Tolu, one of the disadvantages of this holiday is that your feeding expenses will be solely on you as there is no cook available for the trip. Furthermore, there won’t be security personnel to escort you.

Also, I would like to inform you on my interest in going camping with you this summer, we would have fun and need to catch up on lost time.

I hope to hear from you soon. Take care of yourself and send my regards to your family.

Best wishes,

Chidimma

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You explained why your friend would enjoy camping, identified potential disadvantages, and confirmed your interest in joining. The ideas are relevant, though the mention of a 'ten-million-naira-cheque' as a prize at a camping site feels slightly unrealistic and distracts from the natural tone of a friendly letter. To improve, ensure your supporting details remain grounded in the context of a typical camping holiday to maintain a more persuasive and logical flow.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with clear paragraphing. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In addition', 'Furthermore', and 'Also' to transition between ideas. However, the flow between sentences could be smoother; for instance, the transition from the activities to the dancing competition is a bit abrupt. The use of referencing is generally clear, and the letter follows a standard, appropriate structure for a personal correspondence. To reach a higher band, try to vary your linking words and ensure that each paragraph develops a single, cohesive theme.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task, using terms like 'woodworking', 'expenses', and 'personnel'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your message clearly, it is somewhat basic. There are a few instances where word choice could be more natural, such as 'feeding expenses' (better as 'food costs' or 'catering') and 'inform you on my interest' (better as 'inform you of my interest'). Expanding your range of collocations and idiomatic expressions would help elevate your writing to a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are some grammatical errors, such as the comma splice in the first sentence ('...doing well, I’m writing...') and the slightly awkward phrasing in 'your feeding expenses will be solely on you'. Punctuation is generally functional, but there are minor slips that occasionally affect the flow. To improve, focus on sentence boundaries to avoid comma splices and practice using more varied complex structures, such as conditional sentences or relative clauses, to demonstrate greater control over your grammar.

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