Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Sandal,
I hope you're doing well. I am delighted to know that you are planning to go on a camping holiday at Banff for the very first time in this summer and you've asked my advice. I would like to give you some suggestion to make your trip more enjoyful.
The reason why I believe that you would enjoy this trip is that it's breath taking views. The local tourist attractions are like cherry's on the cake. In addition, I heard from someone the atmosphere is really peaceful, and people are friendly there. As a result, you could access extremely different experience on this place.
However, this place does not come without limitations. The weather could be the hurdle in front of you because you could expect heavy rain all the time. Another drawback is earthquake, and you might feel it frequently.
Why don't we go together on a camping in this summer? As we have not been met with each other from long-time and I believe this trip will give us opportunity to travel together and cherished good memories. Let me know what's in your mind.
Best wishes,
Deepika
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining why your friend would enjoy camping, describing disadvantages, and proposing to join them. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, the mention of 'earthquake' as a disadvantage for a camping trip in Banff is factually unusual and lacks logical support, which weakens the persuasiveness of your advice. To improve, ensure your ideas are realistic and fully expanded to provide a more coherent and helpful response to your friend.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on one of the required points. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'In addition,' 'As a result,' and 'However' to link your ideas. While the flow is generally easy to follow, some transitions feel a bit mechanical. The referencing is mostly clear, though the connection between sentences could be smoother in the second paragraph. Overall, the structure is sufficient to guide the reader through your message without confusion.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message, including phrases like 'breathtaking views' and 'local tourist attractions.' However, there are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'enjoyful' (should be 'enjoyable'), 'cherry's on the cake' (incorrect pluralization and idiom usage), and 'access extremely different experience' (unnatural phrasing). These errors do not prevent understanding, but they do indicate a need for more precise vocabulary usage and better attention to standard English collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'I heard from someone the atmosphere is' (missing 'that'), 'have not been met with each other' (incorrect passive voice), and 'from long-time' (should be 'for a long time'). Punctuation is generally acceptable, but these persistent errors in verb tense and preposition usage prevent the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct tense usage will significantly improve your accuracy.
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