Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Ifeanyi,

I am pleased to hear that you are going for a camping holiday at Ore hill, it's a decision you will find challenging and rewarding. I am more happier to provide an insight into the experience.

The holiday is a blend of both theoretical and practical application. First the manager or the chairman as he normally called of the camping site will come to give a brief history of the site, how it was established, who built the first structure till the last building on site.

Your camping tour will really be enjoyable though there are few bad experiences you may face, this will range from very bad weather as the top of the mountain is always foggy to slippery floor while climbing the famous ore mountain.

There are different methods to apply for the trip, you can apply for it at their website or you can contact their office line.

I wholeheartedly recommend you to try one of my experience which is going up the hill to see the famous waterfall from there you can also have an overview of the entire community.

I'd love to recommend the trip to someone or even go along with my friends during my next holiday camping.

Also, feel free to reach out to me if you have difficulties on direction to the location as this is your first experience going for such tour.

thanks

fidelis

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining why your friend would enjoy camping, describing disadvantages, and stating your interest in joining. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat uneven. The explanation of the camping experience focuses heavily on a 'manager' giving a history lesson, which feels slightly disconnected from the typical nature-focused appeal of a camping holiday. While you mention the waterfall and the view, the response could be more persuasive by focusing on the personal benefits of camping. The tone is generally appropriate for a letter to a friend, though the structure of the advice is a bit fragmented.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'First the manager or the chairman as he normally called'. The transition between the description of the site and the disadvantages is abrupt. Additionally, some sentences lack clear logical links, making the progression of ideas feel a bit disjointed. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'on the other hand', 'consequently') would help the flow of your writing significantly and make the relationships between your ideas clearer.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message, but there are instances of unnatural word choice and minor errors. For example, 'I am more happier' is grammatically incorrect (the comparative 'more' is redundant with 'happier'), and 'apply for the trip' is not the most natural collocation for booking a holiday. You use some descriptive language like 'rewarding' and 'wholeheartedly', which is good, but the overall lexical range is somewhat limited. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include 'as he normally called' (missing 'is'), 'slippery floor' (should be 'slippery ground' or 'terrain'), and 'difficulties on direction' (should be 'difficulties with directions'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma splices and missing capital letters at the start of sentences. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they occur frequently enough to limit your score in this criterion.

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