Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear Rahul,
I heard about you are planning to go on camping this summer it's amazing like before you will go for camping i want to give some advise that useful for you and what Experinces i face when i went to Mumbai for camping.
furthermore it's very enjoyable journey because i went to Mumbai forest with my friends last year we really enjoy the views and made food by ourself and did dance at night and explore forest half part in our two days camping. what my advise to you have to pack lot of food and water bottles Moreover, take Madicine with you because any time Emergency will happen with you or your friends. secondly, always stay together with your friends because there is no network in your smart phone in forest area.
I would happy to go with you and your friends for camping . However, i am not able to come because of my job and some house work. next time i will be come for sure .
Yours Faithfully,
chetan Barot
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining why your friend would enjoy camping, describing disadvantages, and stating whether you can join. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the reasons for enjoying camping are quite brief, and the advice provided is a bit repetitive. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your ideas with more detail and ensure the tone is consistently appropriate for a letter to a friend. You successfully covered all parts of the task, but the depth of the response is basic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The letter is generally coherent, and the paragraphing is present, though the structure is somewhat disjointed. You use some cohesive devices like 'furthermore', 'moreover', and 'secondly', but they are sometimes used mechanically or incorrectly. The flow between sentences is occasionally interrupted by grammatical errors, which makes the progression of ideas feel a bit choppy. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus to help the reader follow your points more easily.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic. You use simple phrases like 'enjoyable journey' and 'house work'. There are also some errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'Madicine' instead of 'medicine' and 'advise' used as a noun instead of 'advice'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is limited, and there is little attempt to use less common or more precise lexical items. Expanding your vocabulary related to travel and outdoor activities would significantly improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with sentence structure, verb tense, and punctuation. Examples include 'I heard about you are planning', 'what Experinces i face', and 'i will be come'. These errors are noticeable and occasionally make the text difficult to read. You rely mostly on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors. To improve, you should focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and consistent use of tenses, as these errors currently impede the clarity of your writing.
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