Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
dear kuljeet'
i am writing to express my viewpoints about going on holiday in this summer . As you know this camp will be organised on hillside .so ,you will definately enjoy it becouse this type of sites has plenty of beautiful views of moutains, stones, and local nature .so ,you will enjoy this trip.
however,i also want to tell you that this season is not appropriate for camp becouse of uncertain weather ,which can distrub our enjoyment. and i checked the weather too,which is not suitable for any kind of trip and camping.
that is why i am unsatisfied to go on this camp becouse of this reasons and i give you advise that you can plan for this camp in good weather as well as when we have pleny of time for amusements .
i am looking to hearing from you soon.
thank you
your sincerely,
name karamjeet
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining why your friend would enjoy camping, describing disadvantages, and stating your decision about joining them. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited. For example, your explanation of why they would enjoy it is brief, and the description of the disadvantages is somewhat repetitive. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your ideas with more detail and personal anecdotes. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend, but the overall development of the response is basic and lacks the depth required for a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'so' and 'because'. The transition between ideas is often abrupt, and the logical flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'on the other hand', 'consequently'). The punctuation is inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas and periods, which occasionally makes the text harder to follow. Improving your control over paragraph structure and transition signals will significantly enhance the readability of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic message, but it is quite limited and repetitive. You rely on simple words like 'enjoy', 'good', and 'bad'. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'definately', 'becouse', 'distrub', and 'pleny'. To improve, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary, including more descriptive adjectives and topic-specific collocations related to camping and travel. You should also pay closer attention to spelling, as these errors occur frequently throughout the text and distract the reader from your message.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
Your writing consists mostly of simple sentences. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often marred by grammatical inaccuracies, such as 'this season is not appropriate for camp becouse of uncertain weather'. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'i am looking to hearing from you soon' should be 'I am looking forward to hearing from you'). To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensuring consistent use of articles and verb tenses. Increasing the variety of your sentence structures will also help you demonstrate a higher level of grammatical control.
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