Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Jean
I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to you regarding the holiday trip, which you suggested me. Going for a camping on holiday is really good Idea. I am giving you some of the suggestions in this letter about camping.
Camping holiday is real fun. You can live near the nature for one or two days. You can spent a time in pure environment between the trees, plants and river. You can cut the vegetables and fruits also make it on barbeque or other way. Apart from that, you can make a tent for layover in night. Likewise, you can drink pure river water and use it for cooking.
On flip side, there are some of the negative points of camping such as; Mosquitoes bite- because of so much greenery, there is a chance to get mosquito bites over there. Additionally, you need to be ready to face animals. However, we can choose the place where not much animals living.
I am also planning to join you guys for this holiday, if I get day off on that day from my workplace. As, I had so much fun last time, when I had done camping. Lastly, I hope this letter is helpful to you.
yours faithfully
Ben Brown.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining why your friend would enjoy camping, describing disadvantages, and confirming your interest in joining. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, some ideas are slightly under-developed. For instance, the advice on how to handle animals is a bit vague, and the explanation of why camping is 'fun' could be more descriptive. To improve, try to provide more specific examples or personal anecdotes to flesh out your points. Overall, you have fulfilled the requirements of the task effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific part of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Apart from that', 'Likewise', and 'Additionally', to link your ideas. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'On flip side'. The referencing is generally clear, but the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that the progression of ideas is smoother. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different topics.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'barbeque', 'tent', and 'greenery'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'Going for a camping' (should be 'Going camping'), 'live near the nature' (should be 'live close to nature'), and 'make it on barbeque' (should be 'cook it on a barbecue'). These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your writing. Expanding your vocabulary to include more natural collocations would improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'suggested me' (should be 'suggested to me'), 'good Idea' (capitalization error), 'spent a time' (should be 'spend time'), and 'not much animals living' (should be 'not many animals living'). While these errors are noticeable, they rarely impede the reader's understanding. To reach a higher band, you should focus on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and ensuring that your complex sentences are constructed accurately.
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