Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to apply for a temporary position at your summer camp next summer. I would particularly like to work as a camp activity assistant, helping to organise sports, games and outdoor activities for children and young people.

I am a friendly, highly energetic and very responsible type of person. I am a bit patient, understanding and really enjoy working with the children. I can work well in a team and communicate effectively with others.

I have experience looking after children and organizing fun activities for them in day care, sports ,school and college.I also have good organisational and communication skills. I enjoy outdoor activities and would be happy to participate in sports and games with the campers.

I would be grateful if you would consider my application. I am available throughout the summer and would be delighted to contribute to your camp.

Yours faithfully,

Shagufta Batool

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 1.0

The response is completely off-topic. The task required a letter to a friend advising them on a camping holiday, covering specific points such as why they would enjoy it, potential disadvantages, and whether you would join them. Instead, you wrote a formal job application letter for a camp assistant position. Because you failed to address any of the bullet points or the intended audience, the response fails to meet the requirements of the task. In an actual IELTS examination, this would result in a very low score for Task Achievement as the content is entirely irrelevant to the prompt provided.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter is structured as a formal application, which is internally coherent as a piece of writing, but it does not follow the logical progression required by the prompt. You used standard paragraphing and some cohesive devices like 'I am writing to' and 'I would be grateful', which help the flow of the text. However, because the content does not relate to the task, the overall organization is irrelevant to the prompt. The transition between paragraphs is logical for a job application, but the lack of connection to the task instructions prevents a higher score.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary used is appropriate for a formal job application, demonstrating a range suitable for that specific genre. Phrases such as 'temporary position', 'highly energetic', and 'contribute to your camp' are used correctly. However, the lexical range is limited to the context of a job application rather than the descriptive or advisory language required by the prompt. There are no significant spelling errors, and the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the intended meaning of the letter you actually wrote, even though it is the wrong task.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The grammar is generally accurate, with a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. You demonstrate control over verb tenses and sentence construction, such as 'I would be grateful if you would consider my application.' There are very few grammatical errors, and the punctuation is mostly correct. While the range of structures is somewhat limited, the accuracy is high. The errors present are minor and do not impede communication, but the grammatical choices are entirely focused on a formal application rather than the informal tone requested for a letter to a friend.

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