Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Rose,

I hope you are doing well. As you told me next week you are going for camping with your family at the Blue Mountain, which will be great opportunity for you as it will give you a chance to explore a new place.

Camping is one of the most fun outdoor activities. As it will give you a chance to get a experience of the activities like Mountain Climbing, Rafting so on. The best thing I ever experience during camping is gazing open and peaceful sky for hours. Moreover, as you are too foody hence you will enjoy the cooking outside along with Bonfire.

Although camping seems to be full of fun and excitement, sudden weather change can impact your whole plan. So, it's my suggestion that please take solid and waterproof tents, gear, compass, map of particular place and at least 2 pairs of comfortable shoes with you as these things will be helpful for you during your camping.

I would love to join you for camping but I have some other plans for next week. I do not know if you remember my cousin Julia, she is coming from America next week for her friend's marriage and she insisted me to join her during whole event. As a result, it is hard for me to accompany you at camping.

I hope you will understand my situation and will consider my given suggestion.

Thank you

Lily

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining why your friend would enjoy camping, describing disadvantages, and explaining why you cannot join. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat basic. For instance, while you mention weather as a disadvantage, you could have expanded on other potential issues like lack of facilities or insects to provide a more comprehensive response. The opening sentence contains a slight inaccuracy regarding the timing of the trip, but the overall purpose of the letter remains clear throughout. To improve, ensure you provide more depth to your explanations rather than just listing items or activities.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific part of the task. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Although', and 'As a result' to connect your ideas. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical, and there are occasional issues with referencing, such as 'the Blue Mountain' (which should likely be 'the Blue Mountains') and the slightly awkward phrasing in the opening. The progression of ideas is generally easy to follow, but the flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that the relationship between sentences is more natural.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'bonfire', 'waterproof tents', and 'outdoor activities'. However, there are some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'give you a chance to get a experience' (should be 'gain experience') and 'you are too foody' (which is not standard English; 'a foodie' is better). There are also minor grammatical slips in word forms, such as 'insisted me to join' (should be 'insisted that I join' or 'invited me to join'). Expanding your vocabulary to include more natural collocations would help raise your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are frequent grammatical errors that affect the precision of your writing. Examples include 'As you told me next week you are going for camping' (should be 'you are going camping'), 'the activities like Mountain Climbing, Rafting so on' (missing 'and'), and 'insisted me to join her during whole event' (missing articles). Punctuation is generally acceptable, but some sentence constructions are slightly awkward. To reach a higher band, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and the accurate use of articles.

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