Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Hi dear love,

How are you ? I hope you doing a well! I am writing this letter to tell you about I make a plan for summer camping I want that you come with me so we can spend some quality of time together.

Firstly, I want let you why this trip enjoyable for you because I make a plan to visit America and that is you dream county there are many tourist attraction where we can do different type activities Lastly, most important this that airline I choose for this trip they provide us 50% discount on tickets and provide free hotel as well.

I know it very hard you to took a days off from job and may be this decision put a bad effects on your pay scale. Moreover, I know you tell me about your sister next week you also missed that to.

It is good chance for you to complete you dream and spend some quality time with use.

I miss you see you soon.

Yours loving Aman

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points, but the development of ideas is inconsistent. You explain why the friend would enjoy the trip and mention potential disadvantages, such as taking time off work and the impact on pay. However, the connection to 'camping' is weak; you describe a trip to America involving hotels and airlines, which contradicts the concept of a camping holiday. This lack of focus on the specific task topic (camping) limits the score. The tone is generally appropriate for a letter to a friend, though the content needs to be more relevant to the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or missing. Phrases like 'Firstly' and 'Lastly' are used, but the transitions between sentences are sometimes abrupt. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'I know you tell me about your sister next week you also missed that to', which is difficult to follow. Improved use of linking words and clearer sentence connections would enhance the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, often relying on simple structures. There are several word-choice errors, such as 'quality of time' instead of 'quality time' and 'dream county' instead of 'dream country'. While you attempt to use some descriptive language, the range is limited and does not consistently convey your meaning accurately. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that your word choices are precise and contextually appropriate for a friendly letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'I hope you doing a well', 'I want let you why', and 'this decision put a bad effects'. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of control over verb tenses and subject-verb agreement. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents a higher score. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms.

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