Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
dear raman,
i hope you doing well.i am delighted to hear that you want to go to caming this summer,this is very exicting news.
it has been long time since you went on vacations therefore it will be great adventure and you will get some relief from your daily hectic routine .
on the other hand there could be some possible challenges as well for example you don't know how to cook and for caming you will require plethora of strength.
but the good news is that i could join you with this trip and i have lot of ideas to make it sucessfull for instance i could bring my equipments which i bought last year and it is in great condations since didnot got chance to use it. so lets meet and plan this trip as soon as possible .
looking forward to see you soon.
your lovingly
harwinder
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You explain why your friend would enjoy camping, identify potential challenges like cooking and physical exertion, and confirm your willingness to join the trip. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat brief. For instance, the mention of 'plethora of strength' is a bit vague and could have been expanded upon to better illustrate the physical demands of camping. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is elaborated with more specific detail or personal anecdotes to fully flesh out the response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some basic cohesive devices like 'on the other hand', 'for example', and 'for instance' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by punctuation errors, such as missing spaces after periods and comma splices (e.g., 'this summer,this is'). The use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your punctuation is accurate to allow for smoother transitions between sentences and ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using words like 'hectic', 'adventure', and 'plethora'. However, there are several spelling errors ('caming' instead of camping, 'exicting', 'sucessfull', 'condations') and some awkward collocations, such as 'require plethora of strength'. These errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. To improve, focus on mastering the spelling of common words and pay closer attention to how words are typically paired together in English to sound more natural.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
Your writing uses a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing articles ('go to camping'), subject-verb agreement issues ('i hope you doing well'), and tense inconsistencies ('didnot got chance'). Punctuation is also a significant issue, with several run-on sentences and missing capital letters at the start of sentences. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to lower the score. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for punctuation will significantly improve your accuracy.
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